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Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

0 posted 2002-02-25 12:43 PM

Would have loved you more

but you seemed to keep a score

of all my failures

"As soon as the generals and the politicos can predict the motions of your mind, lose it." Wendell Berry

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

1 posted 2002-02-25 01:08 AM

Here here,

A VERY WISE STATEMENT in Haiku, nice! Too many keep tabs of what went wrong..they are flawless so they think..heh

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (02-25-2002 01:10 AM).]

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2002-02-25 02:25 AM

wow, I knew someone like this....and I think it has to have nature in it to be a Haiku so I think you are right in calling this a senryu

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

3 posted 2002-02-25 05:57 PM

you have failures? nah... what kind of fool would think such...

i just love this one KRAW...how true to human life...how real this is..

enjoyed!
hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

"it may be absurd..but dont be naive..even heros have the right to bleed" john ondrosic?

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

4 posted 2002-02-25 05:59 PM

oops...liked it so much i showed up twice...

[This message has been edited by dgvarner (02-25-2002 06:00 PM).]

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

5 posted 2002-02-25 06:23 PM

Yes, a Senryu ... and a darn good one at that

Well done!

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

RosePetal

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since 2001-08-26

Posts 2985
South Florida

6 posted 2002-02-25 06:29 PM

No one is perfect! I enjoyed your senryu!

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

7 posted 2002-02-25 06:58 PM

double sided flaws
unworthy collection
solid love within

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2002-02-25 07:08 PM

(big huggsssssss) Oh E.J, this is so very touching, I believe no one is perfect and when you compare yourself to so many in the world, you have very few errors and mistakes and deserve the greatest love and joy of all! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is a fabulous senryu! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

strbbux
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since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

9 posted 2002-02-25 07:40 PM

Krawdad, this is amazing. Wonderful work here. The best senryu I have read, No amateur here, floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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