Open Poetry #19 |
Sadness Deeply Simplified |
Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
sad heart sways. I can sink no further than this. One last desperate tear. I'm lonely I love you please come back to me. No longer caring who watches my heart sways sinks drowns gasping My sad heart sways to the lonely side without you here to warm me. Please come back. A simple plea to you from me. Simplicity simplified these words my poem my voice the very thread my spirit dangles on and without you there is nothing to calm my storms. Drowning in missing you. and now I beg shamelessly. I've been too long without your songs, Sir. For all who watch.Dare you say hello? Come in and ask the questions that are on your mind, but spare me your judgement until you truly sipped of me. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Sure do know this feeling. Excellent write! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Temptress - you write of sadness well. Peace be with you Tremptress. Hoping that happiness will return to you... BC |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I've been there, sometimes, still am... I understand this all too well. You pen sadness like no other, my friend. A VERY good job of writing, I might add. Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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crazy4u Member
since 2001-10-28
Posts 67 |
I also miss and i know that drowning feeling. great poem xoxo |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Well said...James |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
I have begged in my own way..and it didn't seem to work..a well written message. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A HUGE hug for you, the Tempting one... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssssss) Oh Jennifer, this is so very sad, my heart cries out to the loneliness you feel and I pray with all my heart that he will come back and forever bring comfort to your heart and the joy you deserve so much! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, my thoughts are with you always! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jenn, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
You have a wonderful way of expressing yourself. floria Floria |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Temptress, Seems everyone drowns a few times before they float, Enjoyed |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
It is my hope that your heart hear that song again soon. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Bravo! Simplified to the point of an excellent expression... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
it amazes me how you can swing from one side of that emotional scale to the other. . . this is proof. . . well done. . . I like the form, and the content of this. . . it's heartbreaking. . . makes the reader feel each word. . . great work. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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