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Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

0 posted 2002-02-24 06:11 PM

Cold sea winds shriek through gaps in the stones.
I come to the broken towers-alone.

This fortress isle is a wasteland
Close to Cardynn’s northern shore.
It’s a haven for seabirds, to rest in their flight.
I wish it were nothing more.

I’m called to ward the circle,
To stand guard this Threshold Night.
No happy celebration here,
No gath’ring in bane-fire light.

I’m not some moon-struck, dewy-eyed maid,
New to the craft, the vow and the gift.
I’ve delivered babes to babes I delivered;
As years raced while the days seemed to drift.

The villagers whisper they’ve seen me stand
And spit in the soul-drinker’s eye.
While it’s true I’ve served light since I was a girl,
Will I pass this last test, or just die?

I stumble, footsore, up uneven stone steps,
Clutching my shawl in a grip terror-tight.
For regardless of hunger, or fear, or my weakness,
War begins when dusk sinks into night.

Nan

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-02-24 06:23 PM

The title drew me in, the masterful writing kept me here. Three times I read, three messages I got...

I shall read this again, and receive yet more...

this, I know...

Marsha

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since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

2 posted 2002-02-24 07:17 PM

Nan darling girl, you know I’m going to say this is good, okay it’s much better than good, okay yes darling girl it’s utterly utterly excellent.

You are an absolutely fabulous writer I love the way you’ve constructed this the story is building beautifully, I was carried as is always the case right into heart of the tale you’re telling. More darling heart give me more.

And look since you posted this after Krissy has gone home for the night I get to answer before she does.

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2002-02-24 07:42 PM

(big hugggssssss) This is sooooooo wonderfully expressive, sweet friend, your wonderful words always make me think and smile! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Nancy, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

4 posted 2002-02-24 07:50 PM

Oh my gosh...this poem is absolutely stunning. You weave a vision with your words that takes me into a kingdom I have never before seen...Absolutely stunning...I love it...**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

strbbux
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since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

5 posted 2002-02-25 09:21 AM

Pilgrimage, this is most fantastice. What a story. wonderful write. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

6 posted 2002-02-25 10:05 AM

Dear Sunshine,
Thank you so much for reading this threee times. That's a true compliment.

Dear Marsha,
Yes, the story just keeps building. I'm getting an inkling of the ending now. We'll just have to see what the day brings.

Dear Noah,
Thank you for reading this and encouraging me.

Dear Startime,
I like to have company when I enter these haunted realms, thanks for coming along. (It would be scary in here alone)

Dear Floria,
I'm not really a poet, but I love to tell a story. This one is shaping up quite nicely, I think. Thank you for your kind words.

Nan

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

7 posted 2002-02-25 10:24 AM

wow - this poem is full of powerful imagery... Wasn't sure if I should read, not having read #1 but I am looking for that now. very rich writing here, with texture and substance of it's own accord. Enjoyed much.

Michael

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

8 posted 2002-02-25 01:56 PM

You've delivered a powerful message,
your words are captivating as is the
scenery you depict.

A perfect presentation, thank you for this.

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

9 posted 2002-02-25 04:38 PM

Dear Michael,
Thanks, I'm glad it struck a chord with you. I hope you like the first one too. It's done in a slightly different style(free verse as opposed to rhyme), but I seem to fall naturally into rhyme.

Dear Blues,
Thank you for your compliment, I revised it quite a few times before posting, I'm glad it worked for you.

Nan

Krissy
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 556
kent England

10 posted 2002-02-25 06:49 PM

Nan hi there I see mum got here before me too, oh well, I can’t win them all. This is a wonderful story I can’t wait to read more. Just post it when I’m here then I get to it first

Very very good writing you are excellent at this

Love and warm stuff
As always
Krissy

And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

BrightStar
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since 2001-04-08

Posts 219

11 posted 2002-02-25 06:54 PM

masterful

Admiring you at Passions.

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