Open Poetry #19 |
Of Long Ago |
Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
She was nine, and he was ten, So long ago, in way back when, The boy next door, red freckled face: She a tomboy, no hint of grace. Construction paper, red and white, Scissors snipping, through the night, Mother's ink pen, extra fine, Will you be, my valentine? Waking up at light of day, Side by side, in bed they lay, Wrinkles landscape weathered face, Genteel charm of aging grace. I am yours and you are mine, Will you be my valentine? She was nine, and he was ten, So long ago, in way back when. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I enjoyed the flow of this and the way the ending sticks in you...nice.. |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Tim - Great story in this well composed piece. Well done. Dave |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this a lot, Tim. *S* Thanks for the reminder that some things last. *S* |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Awww, Tim..so tender is the lasting love you pen! |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
...and in their hearts.. perhaps they still are nine and ten.. Love it, Tim... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
And that's the rest of the story.... |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Oh i love this Tim..very touching.. ~Victoria "Silence is a friend who |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is soooooo adorable and lovely, I never had a Valentine that young, but this year I am so happy I have found my first valentine I love so so much, my Joanna! (big hugggsssss) Such sweet memories fill your words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tim, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Tim- This is adorable...I love it. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Kathleen Junior Member
since 2002-02-19
Posts 20Indiana |
I truly enjoy your poetry, Tim. Kathleen |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Tim this was so so sweet, It brought back memories for me as I met my husband when we were teens, then he went into the navy and I went my way and eventually we met up again and married, So you see, I love this poem. thanks. floria Floria |
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