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Shaping An Image
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Shaping An Image |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Shaping An Image Cold and chilly winds upon my frown The darkness shapes from the unknown Ahead strange perceptions of hope My mind begins tracing a distant slope The tears run down allowing emotions The heart trembles thundering sounds Lungs struggling gasping air out of bounds Each organ a picture of desolation Speechless standing in a hollow Hands sweating searching Nobody to ease the deepening sorrow As day merges into night frightening The image is shaped Marbled in sadness Motionless Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
DJD~ this breaks my heart.....I hope all is ok with you  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Daniel, this is so very sad, my heart goes out to you and I hope everything is OK with you now! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, my thoughts are with you always! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Daniel, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* such powerfully sad emotions flow through these words that my heart hurt for you...I pray things get better soon...**big big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
You have captured sadness so well that I have a familiar lump in my throat. Well done dear poet. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Daniel, you have changed the rhyming scheme from verse to verse and still managed to make the poem work for you. However the last three lines are poignantly sad and particularly well written. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This has a nightmarish feel for me...I shall put it away for awhile and come back to read in the dark...perhaps that will shed some light... |
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marya2 Junior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 36 |
i know a sensitive soul when i read o ne good to read one marya |
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