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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
Upon this vast and brooding sea, Adrift in search of sanity, On timbered deck stands weathered mast, Shrouded sails; night's shadows cast. I cry out in anquished plea, Release my soul; scream, set me free! I grasp as straw, night's solitude, Whil'st stand alone in dark's delude, Do not condemn this helmless ship, For she is caught in viselike grip, Of darkest depths of melancholy, In swirling eddies of man's folly, Crashing waves of hope's despair, Drowning voice of mortal's prayer. Ensconced in chill as stillness wanes, I sail alone; night's darkness reigns. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Tim Such a dark and desperate place in this poem..so very well done. You slide up and down so well from humor to despair in your poetry...you must wear calluses on your palm. Hugs! |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
I must admit I laughed out loud when I saw your reply Martie... but I am too much of a gentleman to go there...*smile* in any event, glad you liked and I do try and move around a bit with my poetry. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Tim, this is so very sad, my heart goes out to you and I hope now you have found tthe shores and sail on paradise with love and hope! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is so sad but beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ti, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh my...here I was gonna wax poetic over your select meter, and perfect flow, and then I have to contemplate calloused palms? (I am trying SO hard to be good, here!) I loved the poem, Tim, but you are right, that IS a classic reply from Martie! ROFLMPAO <----P = perverted, here!  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well done, Sir! Though I am currently landlocked, my soul has met the sea in many ways, and you've brought me to the shore again with this Keeper... |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Incredible. Love this - title caught me and the body didn't disappoint. It's refreshing (irony there, huh?) to see this type of intelligent, dark, introspective/aware poetry done so well. Peace, Christopher |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Blush...sorry Tim..my intentions were honorable, honest! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Enjoyed immensely... I got totally ensconced in your words...  |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
had to revisit this - i really dig it. peace, Christopher |
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crazy4u Member
since 2001-10-28
Posts 67 |
"Night's Darkness reigns" couldn't agree more for the people who don't get sleep at night... like me. wonderful picture u painted with your words. i enjoyed very much xoxo |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
I appreciate the responses. Most often there is an inverse proportion of replies to the amount of effort I exert in writing a poem. Glad you enjoyed. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Ain' that the truth...  |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
heh - so completely the truth. the ones we think bad get rae reviews, the ones good - anonymity. go figure  C |
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