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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2002-04-03 06:29 PM

Taken from a song sung so blue
I’ve been trying to get over you
while my heart still feels a tune
of love once lived beneath a moon

In my soul and heart will reside
one love felt, given, did not hide
As beams of light shine in the eye
beneath a starlit springtime sky

I’ve been trying to get over you
from the moment of a sad adieu
I’ve been aching yet in love too
for the words I write are of you.

My sun has set behind a cloud
as darkness brings forth a black shroud
to cover my eyes as daydreams sleep
and pray to him your soul will keep

A day of love once felt so strong
will beat against a soulful song
As time does turn to memories
my heart in ache will slowly ease

love me ever into the light of eyes
for soul and heart therein me lies
As lasting thoughts are then replaced
by memories in stone of love once traced

[This message has been edited by Magnus (04-03-2002 06:30 PM).]

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

1 posted 2002-04-03 06:40 PM

Magnus darling boy this is utterly spectacular writing, this has some of the best lines I’ve ever seen

My sun has set behind a cloud
as darkness brings forth a black shroud
to cover my eyes as daydreams sleep
and pray to him your soul will keep

A day of love once felt so strong
will beat against a soulful song
As time does turn to memories
my heart in ache will slowly ease

Have you any idea how superior these lines are? I love the flow of this it is utterly utterly perfect. As always darling boy your writing shines. Truly this is one of your utter best. Absolutely perfectly divine writing. Utterly utterly outstanding.

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2002-04-03 06:45 PM

(big hugggsssssss) This is bittersweet and filled with both hope and sorrow, sweet friend, I know how hard it must be to get over such things as these and I hope that you and your love will be together forever and never have to get over mountains like those you said! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is superb! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (04-03-2002 06:45 PM).]

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-04-03 06:47 PM

Your muse is strumming a very sad lyre...but that's okay...even muses have blue days...and sometimes that's when we see the silver lining....

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

4 posted 2002-04-03 06:53 PM

I could hear the guitar in the background..this would make a lovely song..enjoyed Barry..hugss

~Victoria

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

5 posted 2002-04-03 06:56 PM

Barry this truly was like a song, I loved it. these lines just jump out.
"love me ever into the light of eyes
for soul and heart therein me lies "

Simply beautiful. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2002-04-03 07:04 PM

Magnus~
WONDERFUL~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

7 posted 2002-04-03 07:36 PM

Nicely "tuned"

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

8 posted 2002-04-03 08:35 PM

Beautiful...but, somewhat sad and with much longing Barry.
Still one of your best...enjoyed!

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

9 posted 2002-04-03 08:59 PM

From the depths of the well, clear water is drawn...this is most sweetest.
ThisDiamond

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

10 posted 2002-04-03 10:55 PM

Magnus,
A lovely bittersweet write.

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

11 posted 2002-04-03 11:08 PM

Barry~

I have been here, the longing and the saddness.....thanks for this....Peace to you

Lauren~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows of my heart

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

12 posted 2002-04-03 11:15 PM

Barry,
Yup...reality can be painful. Wonderful write of feelings I too have known.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

13 posted 2002-04-03 11:18 PM

Magnus

Some times love songs are sad as well as beautiful, like this one.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

14 posted 2002-04-03 11:32 PM

"A day of love once felt so strong
will beat against a soulful song
As time does turn to memories
my heart in ache will slowly ease"

Now that is some fantastic poetry!

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