Open Poetry #19 |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I've often wondered what it's like to be a drop of water against a pane of glass clinging to that hard, cold surface while trying desperately to fight against gravity (and windshield wipers) a tiny little bead containing a microcasm of wonder a million possible worlds on a sheet of silicon and so, I would remain there until the wind blew me onto your cheek as a memory --------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
WOW Sven..this was wonderful...loved it! ~Victoria |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent image sir. Something to really wonder about! |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Oh wow Sven~, I love this....a drop of rain that the wind blows upon my cheek...makes me look to the skies for rain...LOVELY!! Lauren~ ~Greeneyes~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is wonderful, sweet friend, this too made me wish for the rain so much to come and to step outside and feel the warm spring drizzles! (big hugggssssss) This is powerfully emotional, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sven, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Chelsea~ Member
since 2001-02-09
Posts 260Ontario, CANADA |
sven, this is creative writing, there's much here, well said! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
my friend, as always enjoy your read |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
I am wondering if this isn't an analogy of how sometimes we have to hold on to that cold hard surface until we are swept into the warmth of another. your raindrop is truly a microcosm of the human condition. Well written, Sherry Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Beautiful! I am thinking that I feel just like that drop, clinging to the windshield. Great work. Sandra |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
and so, I would remain there until the wind blew me onto your cheek as a memory ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Perfect Sven...absolutely perfect! Hugs, Nancy. ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I really enoyed this Sven - very whimsical - very nice. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Well, the first part of this made me think of all the rain that was beating on my windscreen as I came home tonight. But then I got to the last part until the wind blew me onto your cheek as a memory and that made me think of more than rain drops…of memories I treasure, and memories I would like to be. Good write Sven. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Well Sven Pen, I love these introspective pieces from you. This is a simple yet clever write. The ending is excellent...it's a keeper Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Excellent Sven....and the ending is a definite Keeper! |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
OMG...one of your BEST. I have no words, Sven! Wonderful! Sauni @~~~>~~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
thank you all my friends. . . it's amazing what a little rain can do. . . and make you think about. . . thank you again. . . your words keep me thinking. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Tara Simms Hall Member
since 2001-11-07
Posts 87South Carolina |
Sven, this is wonderful writing! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Can I add my *WOW* too.....love it as always Sven ((hugs)) Charisma |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like the path your thoughts took on this one, Sven... what a lovely ending! *S* Well done! |
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Jeffrey E. Osborne Member
since 2001-11-01
Posts 160out there |
Definitely one of your most visually powerful (as well as thoughtful) poems. Well done! I enjoyed lots - Jeff |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
thank you all again my friends. . . this one just came to me while I was sitting on the bus. . .looking at the rain. . . rain can do interesting things to the mind. . . don't you think?? ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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