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Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

0 posted 2002-04-02 03:44 PM

I've often wondered what it's like
to be a drop of water
     against a pane of glass
clinging to that hard, cold surface
while trying desperately to fight
     against gravity
          (and windshield wipers)

a tiny little bead
containing a microcasm of wonder
a million possible worlds on
     a sheet of silicon

and so, I would remain there

until the wind
blew me onto your cheek

as a memory

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

1 posted 2002-04-02 03:49 PM

WOW Sven..this was wonderful...loved it!

~Victoria

Poet deVine

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

2 posted 2002-04-02 04:08 PM

Excellent image sir. Something to really wonder about!

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

3 posted 2002-04-02 04:10 PM

Oh wow Sven~, I love this....a drop of rain that the wind blows upon my cheek...makes me look to the skies for rain...LOVELY!!

Lauren~

~Greeneyes~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into th

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2002-04-02 07:46 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is wonderful, sweet friend, this too made me wish for the rain so much to come and to step outside and feel the warm spring drizzles! (big hugggssssss) This is powerfully emotional, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sven, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Chelsea~
Member

since 2001-02-09

Posts 260
Ontario, CANADA

5 posted 2002-04-02 07:50 PM

sven,

this is creative writing,
there's much here,
well said!

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

6 posted 2002-04-02 07:51 PM

my friend, as always enjoy your read

Magicmystery
Senior Member

since 2002-02-13

Posts 821
Windsor, Ontario, Canada

7 posted 2002-04-02 08:20 PM

I am wondering if this isn't an analogy of how sometimes we have to hold on to that cold hard surface until we are swept into the warmth of another. your raindrop is truly a microcosm of the human condition.

Well written,

Sherry

Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow.
But above all... be kind to yourself today.

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

8 posted 2002-04-02 08:36 PM

Beautiful! I am thinking that I feel just like that drop, clinging to the windshield.
Great work.
Sandra

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

9 posted 2002-04-02 08:48 PM

and so, I would remain there

until the wind
blew me onto your cheek

as a memory
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Perfect Sven...absolutely perfect!
Hugs, Nancy.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

10 posted 2002-04-02 09:38 PM

I really enoyed this Sven - very whimsical - very nice.

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

11 posted 2002-04-02 09:51 PM

Well, the first part of this made me think of all the rain that was beating on my windscreen as I came home tonight. But then I got to the last part

until the wind
blew me onto your cheek

as a memory

and that made me think of more than rain drops…of memories I treasure, and memories I would like to be. Good write Sven.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

12 posted 2002-04-02 10:33 PM

Well Sven Pen, I love these introspective pieces from you. This is a simple yet clever write. The ending is excellent...it's a keeper

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

13 posted 2002-04-02 10:36 PM

Excellent Sven....and the ending is a
definite Keeper!

Saunni
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 1777
West Virginia

14 posted 2002-04-02 10:43 PM

OMG...one of your BEST. I have no words, Sven! Wonderful!

Sauni @~~~>~~

The Sun Shines
Not On Us, But In Us
The River Flows Not Past,
But Through Us

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

15 posted 2002-04-03 03:28 PM

thank you all my friends. . . it's amazing what a little rain can do. . . and make you think about. . .

thank you again. . . your words keep me thinking. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Tara Simms Hall
Member

since 2001-11-07

Posts 87
South Carolina

16 posted 2002-04-03 03:54 PM

Sven, this is wonderful writing!

Charisma

Member Ascendant

since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

17 posted 2002-04-04 07:39 AM

Can I add my *WOW* too.....love it as always Sven

((hugs))
Charisma

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

18 posted 2002-04-04 01:48 PM

I like the path your thoughts took on this one, Sven... what a lovely ending! *S* Well done!

Jeffrey E. Osborne
Member

since 2001-11-01

Posts 160
out there

19 posted 2002-04-04 09:48 PM

Definitely one of your most visually powerful (as well as thoughtful) poems. Well done!
I enjoyed lots

- Jeff

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

20 posted 2002-04-05 03:26 PM

thank you all again my friends. . . this one just came to me while I was sitting on the bus. . .looking at the rain. . .

rain can do interesting things to the mind. . . don't you think??

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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