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Columbine
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Columbine |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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Mannequin please tell me true Who wields those tangled strings of you? You answer to the master's call He holds your soul so you wont fall No mind, no voice to call your own He masks your face in raptures groan He covers you with his strong will And binds you till he's had his fill He seals your mouth with words untrue And captures every part of you Until a puppet on the shelf Is all you are - no more yourself And then he takes you, builds his lies And smothers you in his disguise A shadowed form no more of you His word and way has bound you, true No more yourself in transit trace The him is mirrored in your face The strings he pulls you do not see And so you dance on tragically There is no joy in aught you do Nothing new is there for you Mannequin dance on this day You gave your soul; now you pay. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown [This message has been edited by Kethry (04-01-2002 09:00 AM).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth darling sister of my heart and keeper of the moons light, this is awesome, I mean it, this is an incredible piece of writing, utterly utterly amazing writing it’s so full of truth and light The whole poem is spectacular in its execution however these lines positively scream class to me No more yourself in transit trace The him is mirrored in your face The strings he pulls you do not see And so you dance on tragically There is no joy in aught you do Nothing new is there for you Mannequin dance on this day You gave your soul; now you pay Utterly utterly fabulous writing darling heart, I love it . You know I love this poem, purely perfect poetry  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy   To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Quite lovely! But enlighten me as to how the title plays the poem...Columbine is a flower here in the states, and my mind can't make that vision work with your poem, so shed some light dear, and tell me what is it I am missing? |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
The title confused me, too. But the poem, I understood every word of. And related, in a bizarre sorta way. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sunshine and Duncan, Columbine is the name of a dancing doll who does not know she is a doll and falls in love with the Harlequin...the end result is tragedy. At least that's what I remember it to be however it's been years so I may be off in my rendering of it. I hope this explains it. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
yes Kethry, that's it. . . it will be interesting to see how many people come into this poem with something else on their minds. . . well done. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) Wow, oohhhhhhh...I'm so glad you clarified the title too, sweet friend, I read this earlier and I didn't understand the titles relation until now! (kiss on cheek) This is a tragic but powerful poem, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kethry, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sven and Angel, My apologies for the confusion. it wasn't until after I posted that I realised that Columbine was also a flower and the name of the high school where the children were massacred. I hope nobody thought it was about the massacre. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Lynne This was wonderfully written as you told of such a sad story. You deserve many encores for this beautiful piece. Take care.....Sue Suetang |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
This is very nicely done. I didn't know what Columbine, so this enlightned me. Good work.  I'm in charge, and I say question authority! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Great write Keth...love the rythm to this.. and Sven...yep! I had thoughts of the High School where the shooting was...That was my initial thoughts... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thanks for the explanation, Kethry...at least I now know where you are coming from...and yes, dear, according to that story, you've put it beautifully into poetic form.... |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
This is so good, Keth. And tragic. But I seem to remember that Columbine and Harlequin were tragic too. Nan |
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