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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2002-03-26 08:32 AM

I saw the tender
Stretch of neck as she leaned in
Offering her lips to his
With the tentative eagerness
Usually associated with new

My own neck ached
And I touched one finger
To my own lips remembering
The feelings of one offering
With stretch of self,
Of trust,
A touch meant to connect
One to another
Even if only in brief passing

Feeling severed
From such connections
I dangled a few moments
Letting the ties of days past
Twist in memory

Then put one finger
To my own lips

Trying

Still surviving

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-03-26 09:04 AM

This aches with recall, and made me feel as if I peeked in on a very special memory...

this aches very well...

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2002-03-26 09:21 AM

I saw the tender
Stretch of neck as she leaned in
Offering her lips to his
With the tentative eagerness
Usually associated with new

My own neck ached
And I touched one finger
To my own lips remembering
The feelings of one offering
With stretch of self,
Of trust,
A touch meant to connect
One to another
Even if only in brief passing
==================================

its much too early to ache like this...and it not be from old bones....
once again I say..you dont play fair

You just do this so very well...and Im so glad you do,and that I get to see it.
(IWIHWT)

Of all the things in me I could never be,
of the true I kept hidden from view,
the best parts of my heart ...
were the ones touched by you.

jm

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2002-03-26 09:22 AM

Good Morning, Ron

The thought of that finger's tender touch, made the alone in this piece so human and real. Very well done, my friend!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2002-03-26 09:22 AM

I dangled a few moments
Letting the ties of days past
Twist in memory

Could feel the heart wrenching in this one,
it is true though, there is always something there to remind us!
Smile now!!

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

5 posted 2002-03-26 09:28 AM

How well you DO survive my friend.
I love your work and this one is a new favorite!

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

6 posted 2002-03-26 10:25 AM

a very tender write ron..how many times have we all pretended ..recalling foggy distant memories..

~Victoria~

"If music be the food of love, play on." (William Shakespeare)

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

7 posted 2002-03-26 11:19 AM

My own neck ached
And I touched one finger
To my own lips remembering
The feelings of one offering
With stretch of self,
Of trust,
A touch meant to connect
One to another
Even if only in brief passing

This is why I try to catch whatever you write, Ron.

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

8 posted 2002-03-26 12:31 PM

Ron, me too! This is so good.
Sandra

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

9 posted 2002-03-26 12:39 PM

Powerful, Cpat! Blues Serenade was grabbed with the same section as I; it is a fantastic section in this wonderful piece.

Virginia

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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