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Guilt Driven
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Guilt Driven |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa 
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He looked down at his hands as if they were of their own being He looked up to a mirror and a stranger he once knew His eyes, they narrowed smaller, if to guess what he was seeing Was some cruel trick of the lighting though he knew it to be true Then giving up so slowly he allowed his eyes to close And turned a rusty faucet ‘till it refused any more Amidst the sound of dripping he threw on some tattered clothes Emptied out a pint sized bottle, staggered to the door He gazed into an orange glow he held within his palm And drew in clouds of comfort as he shivered in the cold He tried to avoid thinking as he hid within the calm Of smoking away regrets like the pastimes of the old Faces of his family flashed from corners of his mind With eyes of disappointment, though he still thought his own worse He turned away in shame with feeble hopes to leave behind The blessing that he that day swore had turned into a curse He flicked his fingers briskly, watched the ashes sail away Then turned to grab the handle of his ever-aging car And stepping in with haste he then drove off into the gray With no real place in mind on the condition it was far |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 This is outstanding, Kevin! Such vivid imagery, sad, really so sad, but so well presented. You brought this character right up to the front of the camera, yet kept us just enough distance as to not be overwhelmed. You have so much talent, and I thank you for sharing it here. |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Awesome write here! But, so sad also. You sure have a way with words. Loved this  Sauni @~~~>~~ |
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Chrissy Member
since 2002-01-24
Posts 81Idaho, no I am not a farmer! |
Hey Kevin, Well I have to agree with everyone else, this is really sad, but more because it's the truth. This is awesome, and it really gives a person a chance to stop and think about there own life. On a way lighter note. Your a total cutie, feel free to email me. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I"m always drawn to the sad ones, for sure |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Sad and painful, Kevin. You write very well.  sky I'm in charge, and I say question authority! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Kevin, this is sooooooo heartwrenching, sweet friend, it breaks my heart to see so many look back and regret so much they have lost and my heart goes out to this person in particular and I hope he can re-unite with his family and ask for forgiveness! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is powerful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kevin, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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