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wayoutwalt
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TEXAS (it's all big)

0 posted 2002-03-25 05:23 PM



I am unimportant
existence bleeds
into misery's
drain
now gone and left
with picket fences
and bombed
out houses-
memories-
how can I matter
I'm a name on a page
and before anyone will care
I'll be dead
and they'll all say,
"What a queer look
they had back then."

© Copyright 2002 Walt Burns - All Rights Reserved
Marsha
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1 posted 2002-03-25 05:49 PM


Walt darling boy this is a powerful piece from you truly excellent writing.

Wonderful work


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy


To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79


catalinamoon
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2 posted 2002-03-25 08:12 PM


Very powerful Walt. And never unimportant, not you.
Sandra

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3 posted 2002-03-25 09:05 PM


Before anyone cares you'll be dead?
*whap*  That is simply not true.
Are you having a bad day other there or what?
check, minus!       Hey, just don't get your head stuck in the window!  
I would hate to see you go that way!  Cheer up Walt!

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (03-25-2002 09:05 PM).]

wayoutwalt
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4 posted 2002-03-25 09:45 PM


o guys i am cool yuh thanks i was lovin the moodyness of writing this
JamesMichael
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5 posted 2002-03-25 11:33 PM


Sometimes I feel like this..thankfully it is rare at this time...James
passing shadows
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6 posted 2002-03-26 03:03 AM


ain't it the truth!
Kit McCallum
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7 posted 2002-03-26 07:02 AM


Well, I beg to differ with ya Walt ... you are always important in my book. Much enjoyed the dark tone you captured in this piece.

Best wishes,
/Kit

Nan
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8 posted 2002-03-26 08:09 AM


Walt.. You may be a little wayout.. but you certainly are NOT unimpotent...
Marge Tindal
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9 posted 2002-03-26 09:00 AM


Walt~
LOL-ing at -

and they'll all say,
"What a queer look
they had back then."


Just did some high school yearbook-thumbing with a friend ... realized it was US we thought looked like that ! !

Thanks for the smile~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
         noles1@totcon.com                    

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10 posted 2002-03-27 10:17 AM


A-Ha!!! Now I know who's been filching from my supply of self-pity... *G*

Seriously, wow... I like the dark tone of this and love the truth of looking back. *S* Very well done!

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