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Into The Ocean
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Into The Ocean |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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This poem is about missed opportunities and broken promises...It needs a bit of work, but I hope its meaning comes across none the less. Hugs  Ruth Into The Ocean I remember younger years When eight years old with childish fears Despite my pleads, my cries, my tears Dad took my hand and held me near And walked into the ocean My toes sunk swiftly in the sand As we walked further from the land So frightened I could barely stand A death grip on my father’s hand Out there in the ocean My father kept me by his side And led me through the rising tide ‘Till he saw my fears subside Then looked at me with growing pride As we stood there in the ocean With daylight waning, growing thin We swore that we would come again Just dad and I, though not sure when But boys soon grow and become men And forget about the ocean Oh, how time goes by so fast Before we knew, five decades passed Now dad and I, both here at last With tear filled eyes, I softly cast His ashes to the ocean |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
So good to see you posting Ruth...and I would not change a thing of this...it comes from your heart, and touched mine... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you dear friend...sometimes it seems I've been forgotten here, but it's always nice to slip back home if even for a short while. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
hoot_owl_rn - no changes necessary. This is most touching. Yes, the years do pass, and we wish that we could have done different things. I wonder about this, I do wonder... BC |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is beautiful, hoot... and I can't think of anything it needs... except a home in my library. *S* |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh what a sad ending. This must have been hard to write. I think that is the place I want to rest, at the end, also. Sandra |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh my....you made me cry with this one. Truly a loving tribute to your dad. I love it.  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
BC, Suthern, and Vandana...thank you for the wonderful comments PDV and Cat...sorry, this wasn't written from true experience as I don't think I could pass for a 58 year old man if I tried , but thank you for making me feel that I got the feeling across clear enough that you thought it was from true experience |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
Very moving. Very sad, but very good. I like it a lot. "What makes letting go hard isn't losing what you had, but losing the dream of what could have been." |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Ruth- Yes...you definitely expressed this very well. Such a touching write...it reached right in and grabbed hold of my heart. Beautifully done. AND...for the record...you will NEVER be forgotten here. It's great to see you posting again. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big huggggsssssss) Oh Ruth, this is so very sad, my heart goes out to all who have to endure this phase in life and I pray they can always walk beside the water and always be amazed by the beauty of memories and love shared! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, HAPPY VALENTINES DAY, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ruth, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Very poignant writing, hoot. But you have never forgotten the ocean, have you? Corinne |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Forget you? Never.... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Touch this poem and I'll kill ya! It's beautiful just the way it is....to tie the thought from life to death with the common theme of the ocean is really well thought out....reminds me of how much I miss seeing you here. Welcome back, unforgettable one |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I agree but I shall use sugar and spice to plead that you leave it the way it is, as it is simply fantastic. Ruth, living my the ocean what you described would be quite common here, and you captured it so well. You are never forgotten in here, and I personally am hoping to meet you in April  - can't wait!
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Hi Ruth! This poem is truly touching and beautiful. Good to see you again! |
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Wanda Member
since 2001-10-23
Posts 461 |
Hoot; I thought this was well thought out and written in such a way to draw your reader into the poem. An excellent poem. Wanda |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
If any work is needed, It might be additional stanzas to further express things, But the meaning comes through as it is. Well done, enjoyed Gloom |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
well placed the thoughts the images decoration with loving hands enjoyed it ms |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ruth I have precious memories of the ocean with my dad, so this touched me deeply..your last lines brought tears. Beautifully done! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A poem of yours that 'needs work' is a poem that's pretty much perfect... as this one is... Got your ticket yet??..  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Okay guys....you got me almost in tears here. Sometimes I miss you all so much I just got to come home for a bit. Thanks Hugs Ruth Working on April |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Beautiful! 1derful! Lovely! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
so good to see you back inhere Ruth, and I agree with lady in white....you penned it straith from your heart, and touched my heart too. (((warm hugs))) Charisma |
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PearlsB4Swine Member
since 2002-02-01
Posts 130where the heart finds me |
Wow...I wouldn't change a line; this was a powerfully dramatic portrayal of how we all forget the little things in life that are the most important to us. In trying to fulfill their wants, we overlook their needs. ~~sigh~~ so sad... |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
STANDING OVATION!!!!!!!THIS POEM IS ABSOLUTELY STUNNING. I LOVE IT!!! **big hugs** MAGNIFICENTLove I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Good to know that April will see you, Ruth...came back in to read the comments, and here I find you REALLY coming home! |
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