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Leave Me Not Upon The Moor
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Leave Me Not Upon The Moor |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Leave not upon the moor in death my corpse to be another meal take me ‘pon utterance last breath as lips touch and life is once sealed Wrest my heart from this silent chest as love’s gift, for thee I adore ‘Member me ‘cause I fought my best as chill of night invades the shore Fear not my fair, thy love endured though the eyes become dull and hazed Upon my shield in blood inscribed thy name written forever here stays. Lay me in darkest hole of yon beneath the oak upon the hill Close my eyes, softly kiss upon Please warm from this shiver and chill I loved you as noble knight should and kept thee ever safe from harm Return ever faithful I would to hold thee, keep thee covers warm Though flesh doth feed this mighty tree and acorns fall to ground like tears Smile of eyes shall return to thee in eternal dreams all the years. [This message has been edited by Magnus (03-23-2002 08:28 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I see that this is indicative of my asking Kit to please make a moving smile that heaves a heavy, heavy sigh... okay...so you melted me with this one...go figure.... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  BRAVO!!! Wow, this is wonderful, sweet friend, may the tree of your heart forever stand tall and bear flowers and fruit of true love and faithfulness forever! (big hugggssssss) This is very sensitive and lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautfiul heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
This was gorgeous barry..each one is better than the last..hugs ~Victoria~
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Oh Barry, This flowed from a heavy heart with such honor and eloquence. How sweet a tribute to the lady fair. So much enjoy your talent. ThisDiamond |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Magnus...I love the medieval touch in this poem. Knights and ladies fair coming together in a silent prayer. VERY, VERY, WELL-WRITTEN!!!! ***Ivy Rose |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I love the medieval romance in this poem, Barry... Though flesh doth feed this mighty tree and acorns fall to ground like tears Smile of eyes shall return to thee in eternal dreams all the years. Now....about those acorns!  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This style suits you well, Sir Magnus...odds are you eat at a round table!  |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Enjoyed reading this, Magnus! Thank you for sharing it. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling boy OH MY how beautiful is this? Absolutely exquisite writing, the lines fall from the lips like the gentle tears of a love ended too quickly to bear it’s destined fruit. This is simply stunning writing, I’m sorry Magnus it’s just not fair there ought to be a prohibition of poets with your abundance of talent from writing more than two masterpieces a week. I adore you darling boy you know I do, but I’m just going to have to kidnap you or something. HOW, I ask you darling boy, are all the poets with a normal amount of talent supposed to be able to shine as brightly as you do? Hmmmmm is this fair darling boy, is this cricket? And as for me trying to compete with you, huh, I might just as well put my pen down now. Because I can’t, not in the least, I’m a candle to your sun. Okay now it’s understood, only two masterpieces a week, otherwise it’s the kidnap option.    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Magnus...you write so well in this form..much enjoyed the reading. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Just popping in to see if everyone agrees with me....  yep! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Magnus, You get an A+ on this one. Wonderful write. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (03-24-2002 08:35 AM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx KJ...but I am sitting here critiquing my poem as I write....and I feel a few revs. to it.... Glad You and others like these and this style of poetry....I do enjoy writing it. |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
TERRIFIC WORK MAGNUS. "Lay me in darkest hole of yon beneath the oak upon the hill Close my eyes, softly kiss upon Please warm from this shiver and chill" So nice , so very nice. floria Floria |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
We won't leave you on the moor, Barry. Beautiful write. Sandra |
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