Open Poetry #19 |
The Clock Shop |
ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
The Clock Shop he knew it was time the pristine gold fob could no longer keep up and he lost more than minutes each day dependent on his father's bequeathed it was a chain that needed unlinked cobblestone roofed, the ticks resounded as both warning and enticement sand falling from his sandals as he entered the clock shop Grandfathers weighted with pendulous advice Alarms armed with waking strength Tiffany's twirling with diamond precision all the tocks ticking pounding at once, drumming their insistence that each second counted his heart beating could not keep up with the ticks tocking like fists beating on his chest like voices that whisper as one but shout as 24. his decision made he purposely stuffed the timepiece in his jacket rejuvenated like an infusion of insulin still they clammored hammering against inner brass balloons mocking and mimicking with bombing throbs a bestilled silence outside the clock shop he had to look just once with relief at the time he had bought himself: the only watch in the store that did not tick and did not work [This message has been edited by ShadowRider (03-20-2002 08:51 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Jeff, now this I really like! Of course I say that about each one you post, but, there is something about an old watch, or anything for that matter handed down in the family. Broken, running, or not. This left me with a knowing smile on my face and THAT I guess is why I enjoyed it so. Hugs. ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Jeff darling boy OH MY! Such an outstanding and beautifully crafted piece of writing this is utterly utterly wonderful. There’s something particularly pleasing about this piece, seemingly simple, but it’s the construction that makes it appear that way. A very special piece of writing indeed. YOU are a fabulous writer you know, utterly fabulous Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
YAY!!! Ooohhhhhhh...this is soooooo wonderful, sweet friend, your words are always packed with "timeless" beauty! (big huggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is superb! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jeff, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Nancy, you are a most generous lady; gracious to a fault! Sure would like to know what that knowing smile betrays. . .hmmm I had several things in mind when i wrote this, all plausible reasons for the ending. One was to distance himself from family dependance. the others....well....take 3 ibuprofen, and call me in the morning after your Headache subsides! hehehe Jeff Maaaaaaaashaw: What a treat to read your encouragement. Still i wonder if this is the right forum for this kind of work, but who's to say, right? *s* I was hoping a reader might have their own opinion of what this was saying. Maybe its just my style, but i like to think there are several facits to each poem, with no definitive explanation, except from the reader's own experiences. Thankx so much, and both of you, enjoy your day tomorrow and don't forget to keep your clocks wound. Jeff |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Shadow this is so wonderful, I just love the sentiment in here, and the picture of that quaint shop truly added to the poem. great work. floria Floria |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Noah: i think, at some time or another we have all had a favorite timepiece. Now, as i get my first grey hairs (triple yuuuuch), i would like one that would keep time a bit slower. Is that what they mean by: Daylight Saving time? I wonder.....then again, i may just be nutz! Jeff Thankx mon ami! Very much! |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Evening Floria! Dang nice of you to reply so quickly! Couldn't you just spend weeks browsing those kind of English quaint shops? I shudder each time i go into Wally-World with its anesthetic appeal and all. ~braaaaack~ Was going to write something more supernatural, but i will save that someday for a short story instead. That's actually what i feel most comfortable with: short stories. Thankx Floria, for fillling me with a happy glow tonight! Jeff |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Now there’s a good idea…buying a timepiece that doesn’t work. Does that mean time stands still? That you somehow get more hours in the day to do the things that never get done? If that’s the case, I want one like that!! By the way, did you take this picture Jeff? It’s so quaint and looks like it’s a clock shop in England. Your poem made me picture walking into that store and hearing the ticking of all the clocks within. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Hey Tracey! Que pasa, amiga? No...didn't take this picture; i live in the Midwest, but there are plenty of shoppes like this around my hometown. here is the link: http://www.clock-shop-winchcombe.co.uk/ the meaning of the stopped clock: perhaps he no longer wanted to be bound by time, not of his own making; perhaps time has less meaning for him, and its easier for him to think of it as non confining.... perhaps he has exorcised some demons this way..... |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
Well, you know how I interpretted it...all wrong! *LOL* I still love the way you write, the phrasing is so unique that everyone can come away with a different view of their own world from the images you create...beautifully done sweetheart! |
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