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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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you wear my salt word as blush of white on the milk skin uncertainty of your bow my tides beg your touch to expedite your longboat length to pry my wake asunder surge my tides and furrow my wanting Niagara now I worship willing at your breasts volumpt as you charge my winds to tempt with plunge like coppered dice in knight of elbow throw I express my verity with accuracy blown in glass as jewel in sunset eye on heart string strung you crash into my ocean with storm song tembre I know the ache of your witch milk yearn my currents are mouths that hunger hollow with cracked lip sooth for your solution I am the whelming brine of cowper's spurn on morrow I am milton, hyaline and glassy calm you are sails on sand feet with out stockings bathing in languid tranquility at your anchorage you are vagabond in thought of goers or comers a nightwalker of sensation in day sleep passing we are before the wind,.. and we are after then... ©Dark |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  WOW!!! Oh my gosh, you always amaze and inspire me with your descriptive language, sweet friend, the whole poem is outstanding but this is the line that caught my attention most of all: "A nightwalker of sensation in day sleep's passing" (big hugggsssssss) Your words are always dreamy and a pleasure to read, sweet friend, may love always sound and reverberate in your heart, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thank you Noah...that is a pleasent image for me too...that afterglow look |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Liked those last two lines and the sound in between. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
on morrow I am milton, hyaline and glassy calm you are sails on sand feet with out stockings bathing in languid tranquility at your anchorage you are vagabond in thought of goers or comers a nightwalker of sensation in day sleep passing we are before the wind,.. and we are after then... always the wrap up to your thoughts and words... done well and with style.. Enjoyed. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
you wear my salt word as blush of white on the milk skin uncertainty of your bow my tides beg your touch to expedite your longboat length to pry my wake asunder surge my tides and furrow my wanting Niagara now I worship willing at your breasts volumpt as you charge my winds to tempt with plunge like coppered dice in knight of elbow throw I express my verity with accuracy blown in glass as jewel in sunset eye on heart string strung ====================================== this is amazing!!...the imagery, the passion, the whole level of inspire, the metaphor and personification..all of it... very very cool....very very impressive. Of all the things in me I could never be, |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
No one says it quite like Ms. Janet Marie, so I will just ditto her words back to the top... |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Oh my this is lovely, and oh, that last line, terrific work. floria Floria |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Strong poem, impressively created. Sandra |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Cpat, I thank you so much for the review JanetMarie you are a soft wind of pleasure when you touch my words Decaflame, you bring blessings to my words thank you Floria, thank you for your reviews Catmoon, it is so nice of you to stop by...thank you much lady |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"you crash into my ocean with storm song tembre" I LOVE that line.... and the whole poem for that matter.... you are such a talented writer |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Bluesbabe...thank you for your read and re, sorry you only like the two lines (grin) |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well shoot I can't pick one part as they as those words are meant to be together, and yes, it is hard to say anymore than our loving JM, so I am in the ditto lineup with Sunshine, well done and your images sure do jump off the page. ~* Reality is an illusion ~ albeit a persistant one *~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Mysteria....thank you lady friend for your reviews...I enjoy you much |
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