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War Speaks
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War Speaks |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I am not flesh, nor shall I be, but vultures hold me dear. Shadow soldiers follow me to whisper, “Victory’s near.” I forge the sword, I draw the blade; I reek of death and pain. Frightened nations make the trade and lock the final chain. Trumpets sound, you cannot run- this bargain’s sealed in blood. Your young men fall beneath the gun to crest the scarlet flood. I am no god, nor shall I be, yet all the demons bow to me. Nan |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Pilgrimage, this is so so chilling, and so true, You did well with this one. I felt cold chills. floria Floria |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Nan, this is powerful! An exceptional write! A classic! A keeper for sure! Thanks! ((Nan)) -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Dear Floria, Thanks, glad you liked it. Dear Newell, Thank you for reading it, and commenting. I'm glad you liked it. Nan |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I'm not speechless very often. *S* But this left me with so many feelings the fingers couldn't keep up. *S* It's chilling in its truth... and it's wonderfully written. Well done! |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Nan - You outdid yourself with this one. This is really a creative and powerful write. Well done. Dave |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Dear suthern, Thank you for reading this and letting me know. I started thinking about war after reading His Poet's poem about the war veteran who came home mind and spirit-crippled. This came out of that. Dear Dave, I appreciate you reading it and especially replying. It makes me feel like I haven't shoved the poem into a black hole.  Thanks.Nan |
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Accordionmaid Member
since 2001-10-28
Posts 153MA/USA |
Very great...I felt the cold chill while reading, too. Powerful. And, every day, now, I can't help having a few ominous feelings over the war our country is now in. I wonder how...if...it will end! But, then, we must go on and live our lives, too. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
yes, war does speak, and all too loudly I'm afraid. . . well done. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Nan darling girl this is exceptional writing, utterly utterly brilliant. You have truly outdone yourself this time. Every single word in this is utterly perfect, you’ve really nailed this Rarely is writing this good, certainly this far exceeds my expectations and my expectations for you are always high. YOU are a very good writer and this proves it. Absolutely first class darling heart   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Dear Accordionmaid, Thanks for reading this and commenting. I appreciate it. I always have a nervous feeling about wars. But you're right-you have to go on with your life. Dear Sven, War's loudmouthed and uncouth always. Dear Marsha, Thanks girl-you make me smile. Nan |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Nancy, this is so sad but true, sweet frinend, this too has such an ominous feel to it, for I too believe this is happening but it scares me to see this growing so rapidly, and I pray peace can be made somehow! (kiss on cheek) This is powerfully expressed, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Nancy, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Dear Noah, Thank you. Here in America we haven't had war on our own doorstep in more than a century, and we're just realizing what it could mean. We're used to seeing it on the News, not with our own eyes. That's what really brings the chills. Nan |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This gave me goosebumps, Nan... Chillingly beautiful. Trumpets sound, you cannot run- this bargain’s sealed in blood. Your young men fall beneath the gun to crest the scarlet flood I hate it that we are now at war! copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~I feel this, I ache. Wow. What a poem. *Peace. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent writing, poet. Not only does the poem speak volumes but it is structurally perfect...a wonderful combination |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Dear Lyra, I think we all hate war, how could anyone not? I also hate that we have no choice but to fight it. Dear Spitfire, Thank you. I would love to live in a world at peace. I don't think I ever have. Dear Balladeer, How very nice of you! Nan |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
beautiful writing. sadly, the subject is as accurate as your meter and rhyme. truly a comment on our society, when such beauty is devoted to such horror. -Dave |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Dear Dave, Thank you for your compliment on my writing. I don't expect any compliments on the subject as it is always ugly and often heartbreaking. Nan |
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