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Poet deVine

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since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2002-03-15 12:23 PM

I suppose it’s inevitable
because of that last lie
I find myself teetering
on the brink of goodbye

Painful though it seems
I’m not sure I’ll make it
I hope I can be happier but
maybe I’ll have to fake it

I’m too involved, I care too much
my heart is broken once a day
all I ever wanted from you
was a haven, a play to play.

Giving is my nature
but giving out is what I feel
giving up is hard to do
but it’s what I need to be real

rosepetals25

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since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

1 posted 2002-03-15 12:26 PM

Sharon,

This place isn't an easy place to be in

you described it well.

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
- Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

[This message has been edited by rosepetals25 (03-15-2002 12:44 AM).]

NapalmsConstantlyConfused

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 529

2 posted 2002-03-15 12:31 PM

no kidding.
i think most of us have been here at one time or other, and you described it all too accurately.
-Dave

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

3 posted 2002-03-15 01:04 AM

I’m too involved, I care too much
my heart is broken once a day
all I ever wanted from you
was a haven, a play to play.

Giving is my nature
but giving out is what I feel
giving up is hard to do
but it’s what I need to be real

You've written my mind tonight...how scary is that?

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2002-03-15 01:07 AM

Excellent writing...James

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

5 posted 2002-03-15 01:09 AM

*Big hugs!!!* I don't know what else to say...

I want to die peacefully, in my sleep, like my grandfather, not screaming, terrified, like his passengers.

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

6 posted 2002-03-15 01:29 AM

PdV,
Given the subject...this is way too good! And I deny ever having been there.

Everybody thinks of changing humanity and nobody thinks of changing himself. Leo Tolstoy

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

7 posted 2002-03-15 02:24 PM

well, sigh, I don't deny having been 'here' and yes you wrote it perfectly

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

8 posted 2002-03-15 03:45 PM

it's hard to walk away. . . but, sometimes, we must. . .

well done on this one today. . . thanks. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

9 posted 2002-03-15 03:46 PM

sharon,

excellent write....your emotions
are quite intense, and i can relate
to this...thank you for sharing. take
care.

amy

"just because someone doesn't love you as you'd like them to, does not mean they don't love you with all their heart"

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

10 posted 2002-03-15 03:50 PM

You tell em, Hon.

Hugs

Maree

walker
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since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

11 posted 2002-03-15 03:53 PM

Been feeling like that lately, but I'm only on the brink....

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

12 posted 2002-03-15 03:53 PM

tell me about it!

hey.... me too!!!!

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

13 posted 2002-03-15 04:33 PM

'teetering on the brink of goodbye'-scary place to be. Well-written and novel imagery. I liked the poem a lot.

Nan

strbbux
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since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

14 posted 2002-03-15 04:38 PM

Oh I like this so much, on the brink of goodbye.Poet you said this so well. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

15 posted 2002-03-15 08:48 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Sharon, this is so very sad, my heart goes out to you for I belieev there is no word more sadder than having to say goodbye! (kiss on cheek) I hope this heartache no longer applies to you, sweet friend, this is so sad but wonderful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

16 posted 2002-03-16 12:09 PM

Sometimes we're left with no option but giving up... especially when we've given all we have to give. *S* You've written this wisely and well, PDV... whether we've "been there", still reside on the brink, or don't yet realize... you've written for many. *S*

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