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lucky
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since 2000-01-17

Posts 1601
Idaho

0 posted 2002-03-13 12:27 PM

kiss on cheek

high windows flickerin' down through her pain
everybody's in step with the season and ahead of the rain
I asked her how the weather was and she said
just a minute I’ve got to check my almanac which read
tomorrow may be fifty percent slow and the other half dead
I wondered if she had been out in the last week or so
because I knew she was a home-body and never ever goes
she lives on the fifty second floor and it’s a long way down
said she doesn’t get out much or around in the town
her horoscope said it was a good day to stay home
but it always says that so she never really gone
her biorhythms read to watch her perspectives
but I knew her diet had very little objectives
and being so high I couldn’t understand her low
and why wouldn’t she just get up and go
she whined about the rain and her umbrella broke
I mutterd "he he" ‘cause I thought it was a joke
I asked her if she’d like to go and eat
it sounded like an idea to get her on her feet
she said check the coolerator
but I said (kiss on cheek) I’ll see you later

[This message has been edited by lucky (03-13-2002 12:39 AM).]

Masked Intruder

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since 1999-05-23

Posts 1231
Near golden sunsets

1 posted 2002-03-13 01:43 AM

I certainly can't understand a person with those sentiments. Not at all.

Excellent narration, Dale.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2002-03-13 01:55 PM

Lucky

You see into this person..and have written her sad life well.

Siofra

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since 2000-09-28

Posts 551
State of Suspended Passion

3 posted 2002-03-13 02:38 PM

Well, if it isn't the other half of one of our beloved missing members. It certainly is good to see you back.

I enjoyed this as I have a lot of your poems in the past. They tell a good story and you seem to weave your thoughts well into it all. loved it!

"My ears have not yet drunk a hundred words
Of that tongue’s uttering, yet I know the sound:" "Romeo and Juliet"

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2002-03-13 02:55 PM

Lucky~
LOVED THIS LINE ...

'and being so high I couldn’t understand her low'

It's sooooooo good to read your upstairs rambles !
Love ya'
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2002-03-13 03:09 PM

Loved this, and isn't it great we can talk to people like this, and whistle as we walk away, knowing we are all different, and that is okay too?

The pursuit of truth and beauty is a sphere of activity in which we are permitted to remain children all our lives.
~* Albert Einstein *~

Interloper

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since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

6 posted 2002-03-13 03:15 PM

I liked the way you played off her weaknesses.
Well conceived and I enjoyed it

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2002-03-13 07:03 PM

(big hugggsssss) This is so very saddening, sweet friend, it hurts me to feel her pain in these words and I pray that soon she will have the strength to stand up and embrace the world again with a smile and with him both accept each others differences always! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Dale, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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