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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Upon the edge of a ripple that shortly will become calm, or the strain of an outstretched hand soon to accept its empty palm, is the approach of thoughtless sleep that the aging mind comes to yearn For only within youthful eyes should this unbridled passion burn For life cannot forever chase the sun that shines in the sky Soon the horizon must give in and to the day, say goodbye And just on the face of the moon will be the image of the light that once lit up youthful days, but now haunts in the dark of night © David 2002 [This message has been edited by GenXer (03-12-2002 10:03 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Perhaps the best one to end my evening with, Sir...thank you for this...I'm going to take my klutzy body and put it down and out for the night...and on this, the softest poem of the evening... |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i love this one dave..nicely done..  enjoyed~Victoria |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Dave darling boy Oh my goodness this is sooooooo wonderful. I utterly utterly love this one, an absolutely excellent poem from you. Are you telling me darling that you can’t manage passion? I know you can, I’ve seen you very passionate. I think the wench will have to pay you a personal visit darling heart Stunning piece of writing from you, utterly outstanding. I told you it wasn’t necessary to put the kettle on for me love I’ll make my own steam Wonderful writing absolutely wonderful   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! This is wonderfully expressed, sweet friend, I hope now your dreams shine with joy and hope and now you sleep happily with comfort! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet David, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Mmmm, soft as a pillow! Enjoyed much! Hugs. ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Ahh, but the playground of the mind holds eternal youth my friend...sleep well, then RUMBA! Such a beautiful and spiritual write this. There is no disrespect, only to say you are ageless my friend. ThisDiamond |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
For life cannot forever chase the sun that shines in the sky Soon the horizon must give in and to the day, say goodbye And just on the face of the moon will be the image of the light that once lit up youthful days, but now haunts in the dark of night ======================================== This is a cadence kissed beauty... wonderful melodics and imagery laced rhymes. excellent poet sir!! You never knew what I loved in you, |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Now this is classic profound poetry! I wish I had written it! Into my library this goes~ Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Thanks all for reading this. Diamond - I hope my mind stays youthful. It just seems as you get older, that certain dreams are impossible to attain due to responsibilities that you have, or fear of taking a chance because of those responsibilities, and so the dream must be put to rest. Anyway, I think I'll Rumba now.lol Marsha - My door is always open. Actually, my house doesn't even have a door.lol Dave |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Mortals, aren't we my friend, I won't get frightened if I see your shadow cast by the moonlight! |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
I was going to write my favorite parts down.... but it is all my favorite : ) beautiful...... Never give up on your dreams... not due to responsibilities... or you will start to have resentments.... So it might take you longer.. big deal the time will pass anyway.... Ok now I will shut up : ) GREAT Write..... |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
It's true that our dreams change as we grow older, maybe it's the weight of practicality taking its toll. I miss the dreams of youth. Nan |
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His Poet Senior Member
since 2001-12-18
Posts 750 |
Dave, How I missed reading your poetry. This one is very lovely with just a hint of melancholy. I enjoyed every line so I won't try and pick out a favorite. Cheryl |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Upon the edge of a ripple that shortly will become calm," I really like that line very very cool |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
For life cannot forever chase the sun that shines in the sky Soon the horizon must give in and to the day, say goodbye Gorgeous imagery, Dave... loved the poem  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Dave- this was simply beautiful. exquisite imagery you have here...really a gem! take care amy "Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
Wonderfully penned. Thanks for sharing. "What makes letting go hard isn't losing what you had, but losing the dream of what could have been." |
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N orth Carolina Girl Senior Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 962NC,USA |
Dave,ok you showed me up again!This was great but I bet you knew that. your friend, Juanita |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* **big big hugs** Just remember, Dave...no one knows what the future may hold...dreams may yet become reality....**big big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
nice meter and good construction. very well written. i like it. -Dave |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
How sadly sweet and beautiful! Oh sure we are older and wiser, but there is nothing that can replace the stary eyed wonder of our youth. I enjoyed this so much as I do all of your poems. [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (03-15-2002 12:29 AM).] |
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