Open Poetry #19 |
Swan Song |
Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
You are the forbidden swan who has swum into my lake the waters of my life which once held waves of turmoil now remain still and calm in your presence as your wings glide on the water I feel you beauty touch my intermost being and wish for a love that can never be for you are the graceful swan so beautiful your form so perfect your movement on the water that at times I forget everything my problems worries and start to enter the water to swim to you then I see my reflection and retreat into the solitude of loneliness for you are too beautiful for me and if the most gallant swan is unworthy then what of me for I am just a lonely creature hiding in the darkness so scold me not for loving you from my shadow for it is all I can in a love never ment to be and where there is no tommorow. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
This is beautifully written..and very touching.. ~Victoria~ |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Brad Majors~ Hauntingly sad, and one which I can so relate....wishing peace for brighter days, and lots of sunshine.... Greeneyes~ Greeneyes~ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* such incredible heartfelt yearning...Never underestimate the swan...her beauty may see all the beauty that is in you....amazing poem...I understand it so very well...**big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
thank you |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
what longing this poem displays |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wow this is an amazing poem, you write so beautifully thank you for sharing it with us Andrew "The pin didn't drop it came and crashed down" |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) This is sooooooo hauntingly romantic, sweet friend, I too understand how you feel but I know deep down with a loving heart like yours, the swan of your heart will always be so happy to come floating to you and tuck you in wings of eternal love forever! (smiles) May love forever sing to your heart, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Brad, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Brad - I saw the returning Tundra Swans yesterday....they mate for life you know. They are beautiful and so are your words. Well done. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well...I saw this poem two ways, and want to say the first oney was bittersweet, as I was reminded of the story of the ugly duckling, and how he emerged into a beautiful swan. Metaphorically speaking you could take the swan to be a few things (or I did Brad) and I loved how you presented this poem - the words flowed beautifully. The pursuit of truth and beauty is a sphere of activity in which we are permitted to remain children all our lives. |
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