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Brad Majors
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0 posted 2002-03-12 05:14 PM



You are the forbidden swan
who has swum into my lake
the waters of my life
which once held waves of turmoil
now remain still and calm
in your presence
as your wings glide on the water
I feel you beauty
touch my intermost being
and wish for a love
that can never be
for you are the graceful swan
so beautiful your form
so perfect your movement on the water
that at times I forget everything
my problems
worries
and start to enter the water
to swim to you
then I see my reflection
and retreat into the solitude
of loneliness
for you are too beautiful for me
and if the most gallant swan
is unworthy
then what of me
for I am just a lonely creature
hiding in the darkness
so scold me not
for loving you from my shadow
for it is all I can
in a love never ment to be
and where there is no tommorow.

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1 posted 2002-03-12 05:17 PM


This is beautifully written..and very touching..

              ~Victoria~

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2 posted 2002-03-12 05:17 PM


Brad Majors~

Hauntingly sad, and one which I can so relate....wishing peace for brighter days, and lots of sunshine....


Greeneyes~

Greeneyes~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

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3 posted 2002-03-12 05:30 PM


*sigh* such incredible heartfelt yearning...Never underestimate the swan...her beauty may see all the beauty that is in you....amazing poem...I understand it so very well...**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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4 posted 2002-03-12 05:38 PM


thank you
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5 posted 2002-03-12 05:46 PM


what longing this poem displays
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6 posted 2002-03-12 06:09 PM


Wow this is an amazing poem, you write so beautifully thank you for sharing it with us



Andrew

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7 posted 2002-03-12 06:13 PM




(sigh) This is sooooooo hauntingly romantic, sweet friend, I too understand how you feel but I know deep down with a loving heart like yours, the swan of your heart will always be so happy to come floating to you and tuck you in wings of eternal love forever! (smiles) May love forever sing to your heart, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Brad, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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8 posted 2002-03-12 07:21 PM


Brad - I saw the returning Tundra Swans yesterday....they mate for life you know. They are beautiful and so are your words. Well done. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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9 posted 2002-03-12 07:30 PM


Well...I saw this poem two ways, and want to say the first oney was bittersweet, as I was reminded of the story of the ugly duckling, and how he emerged into a beautiful swan.  Metaphorically speaking you could take the swan to be a few things (or I did Brad) and I loved how you presented this poem - the words flowed beautifully.

The pursuit of truth and beauty is a sphere of activity in which we are permitted to remain children all our lives.
  ~* Albert Einstein *~

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