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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2002-03-12 06:14 AM

Interpreting this poem by Su Ting, my way.

The year is ended, and it only adds to my age;
Spring has come, but I must take leave of my home.
Alas, that the trees in this eastern garden,
Without me, will still bear flowers.

Su Ting (670-727)

Of Time

Another year ends;
Outside the seasons changing
Reacquainting friends
Spring to life rearranging.
Dwellings left behind
To come of age in gardens;
Memories of kind
Blossom as each pain lessens,
To flourish in prime
Like Willow Tree in year's time,
Softly mellowing my climb.

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (03-12-2002 10:58 AM).]

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

1 posted 2002-03-12 07:28 AM

Very nicely done,
Catching the spirit of the first translation
In a reinterpretation in another form.

Gloom

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2002-03-12 07:31 AM

Maureen,
Enjoyed both.

Silver Streak
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since 2002-01-02

Posts 3625
FL, USA

3 posted 2002-03-12 07:33 AM

Very nice, Marureen. I enjoyed much!

((Maureen))

-newell

Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com

Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2002-03-12 08:32 AM

YAY!!! Ooohhhhhh...this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your words always shine with such breathtaking imagery and emotion, this is a wonderful choka! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, may the willow of your heart forever bud with hope and joy! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maureen, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

5 posted 2002-03-12 09:43 AM

BRAVA!
Well done Choka!
Hooray for Maureen!

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

6 posted 2002-03-12 04:21 PM

Maureen, I'm keeping this. It's too pretty to let go of.

Michael

Stars will shine when I am gone
Earth will spin on as before
Gulls still race along the shore
Morning star, still kiss the dawn

~ M. Auguste

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

7 posted 2002-03-12 04:29 PM

BRAVO!!!!This is absolutely beautiful...I love it...**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

8 posted 2002-03-12 06:47 PM

Professor, thank you and especially for the Softly needed. *s
M

Sy, I never paid much attention to  English translations before, but some of the prettiest writings are from the Chinese.
Thank you *s

Newell, Glad you liked ..hugsss to you, too*s

Noah,thanx ... I think it was  my first Choka, not sure if I tried elsewhere once before.
hugssss
M

Hello "I" *s...Thanks you cheerleader you lol

Michael...awwww  that makes  me feel so good..I value your opinions *s

hugssss
Maureen

Karen,  "Too sweet"...thank you
((hugss))

M

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