Open Poetry #19 |
Doldrums |
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Rewrite, Repost: Doldrums The ocean laid green leaded glass A stifling still of waters pass Closed eyelids to fires red Everything was still and dead. The wheel was burning ebony My thirst was inner agony A tongue of swollen welt The driest dry I’ve ever felt. A mind of nil that drains your will The ropes of taupe looped limp and still The sails hung dirty gimp and gray A muffled soundless eerie day The stillness takes a heavy toll It reigns your mind and chains your soul And drains from you your wit and mane. It strains your frame to question sane The doldrums echo nothings dream A burning light with nothings deem. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A mind of nil that drains your will The ropes of taupe looped limp and still The sails hung dirty gimp and gray A muffled soundless eerie day The stillness takes a heavy toll It reigns your mind and chains your soul And drains from you your wit and mane. It strains your frame to question sane The doldrums echo nothings dream A burning light with nothings deem. ======================================== Looks like Randy needs a reason to roar and even when youre bored to the beyond... youre still cooler than cool... this line proves it.............. And drains from you your wit and mane. It strains your frame to question sane Crazy like a fox(or dragon) me thinks ya need some tea and company to get rid of the troll of droll. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ Some days you wrap me in your poetry and I am tenderly caressed by your thoughts~ 'A mind of nil that drains your will The ropes of taupe looped limp and still The sails hung dirty gimp and gray A muffled soundless eerie day' You have drummed my dol this day~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"The stillness takes a heavy toll It reigns your mind and chains your soul And drains from you your wit and mane. It strains your frame to question sane" Oh boy .... do I ever know this feeling. You've captured it perfectly Sy ... in your beautiful and flowing style. Wonderful expression! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Something to scroll away the droll *winkiewinkie* |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Seymour, thanks for your splendid thought- provoking poem. Great images, my friend! And also thank you for inspiring another poem, "Through touching" I have posted in another thread. ((Seymour)) -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, I guess I need a raspbery tea fill. LOL Love Ya Randy Stinky. Marge, How about a with the tender thoughts. Kit, According to JM raspgerry tea will do wonders. Silver, Thank you and I'll check on thread |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Sy, just love your tales, my man. jwesley |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Jwesley, Just love your comments. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling boy Do you know how good this really is? You may be in the doldrums but your writing definitely isn’t. this is utterly utterly fabulous and you have a wonderful gift. Thank you for this beauty. Absolutely perfectly wonderful writing Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
A mind of nil that drains your will Um, Seymour??? Just how do you know so much about being blonde? LOL I enjoyed this very much... and wish you a weekend of bliss. *S* |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Boy I know this one, and I had to laugh at JM she sends you fairies to drive them away, too bad it is a family site, or I would have sent you something else! I am curious though (being a blonde and all), how is it you know so much about being a blonde too? LOL ~* Without deep reflection one knows from daily life that one exists for other people ." *~ |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Seymour every poem you write seems to just get better and better and hmmm how good will you get? this is a most wonderful writing, floria Floria |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marsha, You mush me away, LOL Suthern, Why they are my favorate subject. Sandra, Besides red heads and brunettes that's my favorate color. LOL Floria, Thank you sweet. |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
This has a very tired, aching, ready to go beyond feel...I hope I wake up from it soon, just as I am sure you do... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Oh Seymour, I know just how you feel, I know this kind of ache so feel, for I have been having the doldrums this week and I miss my love so much and just yearn to start Spring Break! (sigh) May the faeries of light all come to our hearts and take us away to hope and bliss, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Soleil Noir, Thank you so much for the read and comment. Noah, Always enjoy your comments. |
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