Open Poetry #19 |
Just needed to vent |
amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
For Someone's Friend You died yesterday In a subtle Self-inflicted way And left behind An aching man Who found you there In another land I don't know how To say the words To comfort him To ease burdens. We never met I knew your place And understand That horrid space And why you left On your request But left behind An injured man Who struggles now To understand Why a friend Wouldn't take his hand. In two hours talk I traveled back To my horrid walk That darkened path To show this man The reason for Your inevitable plan I do not judge It's not my place Life is a trudge For human race. But why Valentine's Day... Please, know You are not forgotten. "sorry about the meter...I just am not mentally here tonight" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
There is no correct meter for such a verse, m'friend! I am here, should you need an ear! |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Thanks Serenity. I just wish their were words. The whole thing is just plain messed up. I'm just guiltily frustrated, because I want to fix it and can't. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Powerful write...we can 'fix' nothing but ourselves. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
ohgod!!! i have no words..... *tears here..... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh my gosh, this is sooooooo heartbreaking, my heart goes out to you and I pray that comfort and healing can come to you and your friends friends! (big hugggsssssss) I have nothing more to say, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I'm really sorry you are going through this....(((hugs))) for you |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
We cannot repair the losses others endure but we can ease their comfort and learn from them. My heartfelt condolences at this sad moment. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A good vent...a very good job, indeed... |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Ohhhh Amusemi, sigh. Please, don't touch this. It is a piece of healing, and it would change the moment if you did change it. I firmly believe that when poetry is written from soulful lament, true despair, it should be allowed to stand as it is: wonderfully beautiful in its own write. Please take care, and here's a hug to ease the grief, K. ((((huuuugggg))))) struggles are part of life i guess JkF |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Helplessness, frustration and loss are very heavy emotions to handle. Some things just don't rhyme. Good thoughts your way, amusemi... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
How sad. I know how lonely life can feel, but still, what a desperate thing to do. And it always affects someone else, something for everyone to bear in mind. Take care. Sandra |
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