Open Poetry #19 |
the Stars Spilled Rage |
Mark Coburn Member
since 2002-01-24
Posts 71 |
the Stars spilled rage milky white coming of age so distraught, shaking fists of rage.......cryin' out,"what I gotta do?" this morning the Stars spilled rage full Moon hung it's aged face all that was believed turned upside down once again..... this morning the Stars spilled rage I realized the futility of my feelings once again is it not enough, this Love of the friend and why all this feeling to the bitter end? this morning the Stars spilled rage Me, I arose from the grave as Beast........howling and growling Art making Priest......Mark Coburn |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
Very interesting write.Held my interest well.Great job. Peaches |
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Mark Coburn Member
since 2002-01-24
Posts 71 |
thanks so much peaches......I kinda like this one and plan on performing it real soon |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I felt this one..but for the last line ...I am not sure I understand it..can you explain your meaning? *s M |
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Mark Coburn Member
since 2002-01-24
Posts 71 |
nakdthoughts......Iam a wire sculptor and poetry performer/harmonica player in the Highlandtown arts district in baltimore md. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, this is fabulous, sweet friend, you always express your feelings so powerfully and honestly in your words! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, I too agree that you should perform this live, I know you would do a fabulous job!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Mark, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (03-06-2002 05:58 PM).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
WOW!!Passion flames from these words...Absolutely stunning...I love it...**big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
didn't quite get the end there...? am i missing something? had a good poem going too. Christopher God, does anyone go through this life just feeling okay most of the time? And are they all on really good drugs? And can I get a prescription... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Mark, I like the frustrated feeling you held here. It came out strong. May I ask you, did you ever live in NH? Sandra |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I liked this a lot....especially the repeated line, I loved the image and it carried your feelings through the poem well. Great work! *Krista Knutson* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mark~ This is a gorgeous piece ... I can 'see' the performance~ I'd love to see you do it .. As a fellow-harmonica player ... I'd like it even more~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Mark Coburn Member
since 2002-01-24
Posts 71 |
WOW>>>>>>thanks everybody......I definitely wrote this as a performance piece and will do it at Funks Coffee House here in Baltimore on Monday night coming... sandra I never did live in NH .....I am a native of Wash. D.C. who lives in Baltimore Md. now making wire and rebar sculptures and performing my poetry with or without music every chance I get.....mark |
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