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I wish it was snowing
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I wish it was snowing |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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…and I tried to explain to the officer that my coffee tasted like tears and that it was overfull but the sound of eighty five miles an hour kept him from hearing me and then as if I were a danger to someone else or me-he followed like that would stop what is killing me and my family every one who counts and everyone I love and for that matter, every single person in this ****ed up world and not everyone can fit on that narrow path to heaven, don’t you know and so who is chosen to walk and who is not and am I one of the not’s is all this aching and searching doing one bit of good and when I am alone and all of my insides are on the outside my wails worrying the evidence of the sinner in me- is there anyone who hears….people are staring again…I wish it were snowing- the snowflakes would take their eyes off of me and you know when I look into his eyes and decline his invitations…sometimes I ask…if he were six inches taller would I be crying right now would my wedding ring come unglued - in his arms, would I be less or more of me would I finally smile…oh and back to that narrow pathway thing I was talking about…if I was ever on it I think I am over the edge right now and is that a snowflake…I wish it were snowing so I could not look at me |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ok.... where to start... this is a very pwoerful and personal write...one I am not sure I am qualified to comment on other than to say it packs a punch...and it carried me through several readings searching for more... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Well... I know if I try to scold you for sneaking this on and not letting me know it's here you'll just tell me it's an old one so that doesn't count. *S* But it does. *S* But you don't play fair... you distract me from working up a good head of scolding steam with words that demand attention... which covers, by the way, just about anything you write. *S* My memory isn't good enough to know if this is a revision... but even a blonde couldn't forget those first few lines... or the pain that spills out faster than coffee at 85 mph. all of my insides are on the outside ...... I think I am over the edge right now and is that a snowflake…I wish it were snowing so I could not look at me Oh, geesh, lady... I do love your descriptive powers... excellent write! |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
This is so so powerful and heartwrenching, and I love your words but I am sad for you. And what a wonderful idea, snow covering us up so no one could see us. Very creative. My friend, the path is not the answer, There is no way to be good and get to God. Just ask. thats all. take care. lovely write. floria Floria |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (BIG HUGGGSSSSSSS) This is sooooo very sd, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and your sorrow! (sad sigh) I too have feelings like this all the time, but I know deep down as long as we ask for His invitation, He will come and He will guide us always with this love that will always shine! We all love you so much, sweet friend, God Bless You, my thoughts are always with you! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jellybeans, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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