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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2002-03-04 08:34 PM

Beneath thy breach thee knight doth wait
in shadow of thy grill and grate
as moon and stars in eyes doth shine
Tis me...tis me...in love of thine.

For at yon door of chamber high
thine servant doth keep watch of eye
And in thy sleep ye shall once view
most pure of love mine heart imbue

Wilt thee in sleep spur to desire
as visions doth thy passions fire
Yay maid, of thine this heart is true.
Wilt not thy bed be come once two

Mine heart wilt jump at whispered call
if thee wilt let thy kerchief fall
And into arms of mine thee fly
as thy love’s dance doth wait thee nigh

Yon call of trump and flute and lyre
shall take thee to our dance of fire.
Thy feet so soft, in step of light
In gown of red thee beauty's sight

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

1 posted 2002-03-04 08:36 PM

Lovely write Barry, I love this verse.

"Mine heart wilt jump at whispered call
if thee wilt let thy kerchief fall
And into arms of mine thee fly
as thy love’s dance doth wait thee nigh"

So enchanting. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

2 posted 2002-03-04 08:44 PM

Very beautiful Sir Barry...you are not
a swine afterall ha..

~Fair Maiden Victoria

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

3 posted 2002-03-04 08:55 PM

Mmm, I love this style. You are a true knight, Sir Barry.
Sandra

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2002-03-04 08:57 PM

Mine heart wilt jump at whispered call
if thee wilt let thy kerchief fall
And into arms of mine thee fly
as thy love's dance doth wait thee nigh
===================================

thy poem tis a sigh in waiting
a breathless high of anticipating
thou art a poet ... this proves thee so
tho thy name reads Magnus ... we shall call thee Romeo

*superb vocab and phrasing Barry!!!!
very well done Poet Sir

So it seems your saving grace was only saving face,
you thought he was wanting you...
but he was only wanting you to let him off the hook.

~BNL~

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-03-04 08:58 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Awwwwwwww, you are soooooo romantic, sweet friend, you truly are our Shakespeare of this generation! (smiles) We all love you so much, sweet friend, may you forever hold true love close in your hearts castle! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

6 posted 2002-03-04 09:13 PM

Yon call of trump and flute and lyre
shall take thee to our dance of fire.
Thy feet so soft, in step of light
In gown of red thee beauty's sight

Magnus - Fine sir, thou lady in red dances only for thee. Well done!! Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2002-03-04 10:45 PM

Barry...this is wonderful...and you sire are amazing!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

8 posted 2002-03-04 10:49 PM

Very, very well done Magnus! Jealous am I.

jwesley

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

9 posted 2002-03-04 10:54 PM

"And in thy sleep ye shall once view
most pure of love mine heart imbue"

Oh Barry ... what a wonderful cadence throughout. Such a soft flow, enhanced by the excellent use of language. This was a delight to read, very much enjoyed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

10 posted 2002-03-05 10:54 AM

Thy whispered word comes upon the air
thy seek of hand still lingers there
upon thy cheek laid soft, caress
and hold this heart within thy chest

Ah, Sire, from this well please drink
bring love back from slumber's brink
through the shadows of evermore,
softly bid me through this door

For I would bid thee sweet adieu
if thee promise twilight with you

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

11 posted 2002-03-05 12:26 PM

Magnus darling boy Oh WOW when YOU write you really write, this is utterly utterly fabulous. This is so incredibly beautiful I love it love it love it,

Absolutely perfect poetry

I’ve read fabulous pieces from you before this is simply stunning. Truly you’ve outdone yourself darling boy.

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

12 posted 2002-03-05 08:25 PM

*sigh* how I have missed the romance that flows in your poems...Magnificent...I am always lost in a dream when I read your poems, Barry...I love it...**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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