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Touching The Warm
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Touching The Warm |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She leafed thru the curled pages of the poetry journal, pausing longer on some entries than others. Time seemed to slow in the room, while waiting for her to reflect. She lingered there, in her moment of retrospect. Even the shadows falling across the room seemed to be waiting for her confess. "You only write with sad ink now. You hold the rose, but only touch the thorn, you look to the stars, but you dont make a wish ... you stand in the sun, but only feel the burn." "Burn? Not any more. Most days ... I don't think I'll ever be warm again," came the reply. "You've stopped believing in me," she whispered. "No, not in you -- in me, I don't believe in me." "Do you still believe in the stars? she queried. "Stars are like wishes, endless and always just out of reach." "You know I understand, right?" she said, resuming her place in the journal. "Yes, I know and I'm sorry for the melancholy." "Don't be sorry," she said. "If you must be, then be warm." "And where will you be?" "I'll be here, right where I've always been, counting the stars for you. You just have to reach out for me ... and then believe." "Yes ... I know." She lit a candle as the shadows consumed the room. The light danced in ambered inspiration on the walls ... and for a while, both touched the warm. Janet Marie |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"Stars are like wishes, endless and always just out of reach." I wrote a poem awhile back about wishing on a starless sky. My words were meant to ease an ache within myself, knowing this wish would never come true. But then the most outrageous thing happened. I got my wish. All that to say...even the stars aren't really out of reach. And sometimes, you dream and don't really even know it. (That makes no sense but oh well, I'm saying it anyway. lol) Good to see you up and writing this late night/early morning, JM. This was a most extraordinary poem! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet Marie What a treat to read this inspired poem! "I'll be here, right where I've always been, counting the stars for you. You just have to reach out for me ... and then believe Now you got my poetic envy going big time..so glad to see you here though..your top notch at this, you know...writing the heart. Love you, girly! |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
OMIGOSH! This is breathtaking, Lady. You tell a story well. I get the feeling that since she's reflecting and reading a poetry journal then she's having a conversation with that part of herself living in the journal. Or maybe she is speaking with her journal. I get so much out of this. Its simply wonderous as all your work is. Great to see you posting. *Jenn* How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Janet, I don't even know what part I like best. Your words flow so smoothly... *sighs* Your writing always manages to tug and grab at people's heart. I too am envious.. and lucky to be able to read you  Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home [This message has been edited by rosepetals25 (03-04-2002 12:45 AM).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"She lingered there, in her moment of retrospect. Even the shadows falling across the room seemed to be waiting for her confess." Ah JM .... I love the conversational aspects in this piece. I do believe you took me right there, into the moment with you. Such a wonerful mood you've captured within these lines. Very much enjoyed gator-gal, well done!  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, You write like an angel weather it be sad or glad. If you would like to get out for a while I'll sadle up Randy and we can fly and walk among the flowers for a bit. Maybe have some raspberry tea.  Winkiewinkie Randy Stinky |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Janet Marie Hi there its Krissy (Mushy’s daughter) This is what I call writing, how lovely and graceful was this I could see the whole of this picture. Thank you what a beautiful flowing vision this was. Wonderful writing I enjoyed this tremendously   Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
. "You only write with sad ink now. You hold the rose, but only touch the thorn, you look to the stars, but you dont make a wish ... you stand in the sun, but only feel the burn." "Burn? Not any more. Most days ... I don't think I'll ever be warm again," came the reply. Filled with phrases and passages I adore...this indeed is a treat to read before I start the boring job of reading contracts... your talent is showing my friend...and I always benifit when you share it with us.. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwwwww, this is soooooooo wonderful, sweet friend, this poem brought a smile to my face feeling the hope in the end and how it painted over all the melancholy with warmth and joy! (kiss on cheek) BRAVO!!! I LOVE IT!!! We all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Janet, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
She lit a candle as the shadows consumed the room. The light danced in ambered inspiration on the walls ... and for a while, both touched the warm. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Janet Marie, what a beautiful way to start my day! So good to see you posting here this morning! I love the entire piece, and you have a way up sweeping the reader up and carrying them along until the end, then gently setting them down with a sigh. Wonderful writing..and started my week off perfectly! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
"You only write with sad ink now. You hold the rose, but only touch the thorn, you look to the stars, but you dont make a wish ... you stand in the sun, but only feel the burn." You've captured conversational style poetry and added a subtle rhyme that delights... I'm convinced you really do think in rhyme. *S* This is beautiful, JM... I particularly like these lines - what a wake-up call to anyone who's been going through the motions instead of really living. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Janet Marie darling girl this is utterly utterly gorgeous, thank you for this delicious and wonderful beauty of this. This is utterly outstanding As always darling girl your writing shines with inner depth, superb use of imagery. This carried me away, utterly utterly fabulous writing YOU are indeed a writer. Thank you for the delight of this one    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Shadows waiting for confession... amber inspiration.... does it get any better than this? Nah.... |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Time seemed to slow in the room, while waiting for her to reflect. She lingered there, in her moment of retrospect. Even the shadows falling across the room seemed to be waiting for her confess" It does move slow doesnt it? sometimes I swear time stops and could it? I have been in this room, waiting, wondering...confessing all my doubts...asking all my whys....the shadows fell and continue to do so....but I am beginning to see that light which makes me warm....again....In awe of this....and you knew I would be...love you sweet butterfly....continue to let the wings fly....the stars will do the guiding...  Lauren~ Greeneyes~ Step through the barrier of my mind, enter my soul, feel my desire, let my eyes guide you into the shadows of my heart [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (03-04-2002 10:32 AM).] |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Janet Marie, you have outdone yourself. "stars are like wishes" lovely lovely work. floria Floria |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Simply beautiful Janet...James |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
ahhha me thinks you are having a conversation with your muse.....like the others....I love this.... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Do I have to tell you how intelligent I think that muse of yours is, and what a wonderful friend you have in her? I didn't think so ~* If I made you "feel" anything at all today, that makes me smile *~ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
lovely janet marie..why are wishes always out of reach?..but almost at our fingertips...enjoyed...you should write more often...hugs ~Victoria~ "Mistakes are the portals of discovery." |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
The stars are the souls who've departed. Why not? You're getting warmer. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Duncan ... you make perfect sense to me...*S* ... thank you for sharing your insight and you know I am very happy to hear you still believe and that your wishes are coming true. thank you for the kind reply to this. Martie ... well I am smiling here now...poetic envy coming from you is a major compliment, thank you so much...and that includes thanks for making me want to try and write free verse. Your style has influenced and inspired me many times. TY and love you too!! *S* Jenn ... thank you for the breathtaking reply *S* yes...this is supposed to be a conversation with my muse....Seems like I am always talking to myself these days *L* thank you for such kind words and for letting me know what you saw in this. Tara ... what a sweet thing to say....I think I am the lucky one, and your sincerety makes me sigh *S* thank you so much girlie for all your encouragement. Kit .... well its not easy with me moody muse LOL but thank you for letting me know the mood was felt...thank you for you kind words as well my smiling gator-gal *L* Sy-babes....bring on Randy and lets go...Im ready to fly..I'll bring the tea ... you bring the winkies. TY for just being you me Stinky-love. Krissy ... thank you for such a sweet reply, and welcome to Poetry Land. Capt ... thank you poet sir for such generous words and I am so glad you can sneak in here for a poetry break...maybe those contracts need to rhyme LOL! TY Ron. Noah ... your replies are as warm as the morn sun .. thank you for your kindess. Nancy....and now youve made my day too *S* Thank you girlie for such a uplifting reply. I appreciate it muchly. Ruth ... Ya know around here they think somethings wrong when I wander thru the house talking to myself in rhymes, only another poet can understand. *L* ... thank you dear girlie for always noticing the subtleties and for such a lovely reply. My muse is good at giving me wake up calls...But then she knows best when I need them. TY so much. Marsha ... and your replies are "utterly utterly" enthusiastic . Thank you so much. Sun ... does it? Well...lets hope so...gives us something to work towards *wink* thank you for the warm of your words. *S* Lauren ..."the wings fly....the stars will do the guiding" that is a beautiful thought sweet poetess...thank you for sharing the warm of your insight. Love ya too my sister in longing. *S* Floria ... and I thank you for the lovely lovely reply ... I appreciate your kindness. SBJ ... thank you for the beautiful reply poet sir. SEA ... methinks ya know me well girlie....*S* thank you and Im pleased you like this. Sharon ... Intelligent is not a word that comes up around me ofter LOL thank you dear poetess ... and yes...me moody muse and me seem to be coming to an understanding of late....or perhaps shes taken pity on me. *L* TY Victoria....thank you so much for the encouragement...I keep telling me muse the same thing. *S* TY. Richard ... The stars are the souls who've departed" now thats a lovely poetic thought..thank you for the warm of your words poet sir...Im trying anyway( to be warm again) TY *S* thanks you EVERYONE for your generous replies and kind support. You humble me. love to poetry land. jm So it seems your saving grace was only saving face, |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Time seemed to slow in the room, while waiting for her to reflect.' A freshly unique JM classic...you didn't even have to put your name on it...I would've known in a second who wrote this...fantastic poem, J...I'm loving it a lot...definitely from "the chair is over there" kid with all those inner rhymes and impeccable cadence, EVEN in free verse...  ...excellent work, girlie!k   And though my heart feels all alone without you I still hear you sing to me I still hear your voice on the sea... [This message has been edited by snowpants (03-04-2002 10:09 PM).] |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Been a while since I read anything (or seen anything) of yours JM...my gosh...what I've missed. Loved and enjoyed this...down deep. jwesley |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Dear Lady..I am late..that is my name lately. but it's never too late to read you. This struck me: "Time seemed to slow in the room" That to me is "muse entrance evidence"..such as plasma is for believers of things that go bump in the night? Yeah, freaky huh! LOL..but to me all things slow down and I feel asleep on the outside but so much more in tune on the inside...and then it is there..the words..the ones I can't ever find when I am simply wishing for them. That is when..I see things written in replies such as: !!!!!!!!!!! IWIHWT !!!!!!!!!!!!!! I wish I listened there as well as you do. Awesome you! Awesome deep write.... Warm hugs poetess. Sincerely, Regina |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
the stars dangle in the sky, waiting to be wished upon. Make your wish JanetMarie, and may they always come true. Heart hugs to you sweetie. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
the things we read in old journals that seemed old when we heard them the first time and are younger now enjoyed it jm |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Kris ... thank you girlie....I knew I shouldnt of left out that chair line... LOLIm never gonna live that one down, maybe one of these days I'll write free verse and leave out the rhyme...Nahhh  TYJW ... yeah, my moody muse is a hit and miss thing...never know when she's gonna talk to me *L*....thank you for finding this one...so good to hear from you. Reggie....you arent late... youre just distracted thank you girlie for such an awesome reply!!! and for your warm insight. TY.Donna ... thank you sweets...and same back to you. theres enough stars for us all, right?. DS....yes... thats it exactly, thank you for stoping in poet sir. I appreciate it muchly. thank you all for your kind replies and well wishes. jm |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Even the shadows falling across the room seemed to be waiting for her confess hiyaJanetMarieSweetie, well I found this one a few pages back and its going back-up2the-top cuz it's greeeeeeeeeat... Ohhhh,I so very much enjoyed this read... Muaah on cheekz2uPoetFriend *~coco~* |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
JM, First off I apologise for my lateness. You know how life gets! But sweets this is absolutely stunning! I always know when I read a JM poem my eyes are going to be graced with true poetry in motion! And this was certainly no exception! You rock babe, you really do!! Take care. amy "you can't stop |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
And I thought I was the only one who talked to their muse! My conversations are never this good though. Janet, as usual, you touch the heart tenderly with your words. Don't ever stop. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Janet, this is a great way to start out a new month. And I agree.... wishes are like the stars......out of reach. The trick is to keep reaching. Thanks for sharing these lovely words, ME |
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baerlon Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 197Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA |
I'll be here, right where I've always been, counting the stars for you. You just have to reach out for me ... and then believe." I loved that ... Arrgh dang it Janet, your ablity to write just keeps showing me how out of practice i am. ;-) Of course your work shows your dedication. Thanks for sharing. There's a peace inside us all |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This is a beautiful, poignant, introspective poem. I understood too well the part of only writing with sad ink. Oh, the whole poem is wonderful! I just love it! So much feeling - so much sadness - but not hopelessness. Strongly worded and well written. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet, this was a wonderful write. It speaks to some of the emotions in my thoughts of late. I need a deversion... Come devert with me...lol Parker |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Time seemed to slow in the room, while waiting for her to reflect. She lingered there, in her moment of retrospect. Even the shadows falling across the room seemed to be waiting for her confess. … … … "Stars are like wishes, endless and always just out of reach." "You know I understand, right?" she said, resuming her place in the journal. … … … She lit a candle as the shadows consumed the room. The light danced in ambered inspiration on the walls ... and for a while, both touched the warm. ---------- Oh, you are so captivatingly brilliant... Wonderful poetry flows from you, Janet, my friend... and the idea so inspriational that even I came up with some thing here... hope you like it... Regards to you, Janet, Sudhir Lingering around like a smile searching the soul for wishes while she gazes at the glancing stars - shimmering divinities that keep staring back at you as if double-daring to make a wish Stars appear out of reach like wishes hiding deep in the heart of the wishing well But then, though at times, all good things seem far away, things do turn around just like changing seasons. All that needs to be done is light a candle and notice - the flickering of the flame in searching for oxygen in the air while in constant belief that life is supported by the very elements that create a sustained warmth be warm |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Beautiful JM........truly a treat to read. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
"I'll be here, right where I've always been, counting the stars for you. You just have to reach out for me ... and then believe." There’s something about those lines that really caught me. And I love the conversational way you wrote this piece. Not sure how I missed this the first time round, but I’m glad I caught it now…better late than never!! It’s so rare we get to read your poetry and I’d hate to have missed it. It really is fantastic writing, but I’ve come to expect nothing less when I see your name. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Do you guys know how very very cool you are?  I have out of town company staying for the week and its been so hectic lately that I've hardly been able to be here, so coming in and finding this one back up and reading these beautiful replies means so much...thank you all for the generous and humbling encouragement that you give my poetry. You guys never cease to amaze and touch me...and always make me "feel the warm." Coco and Dee ... thank you for always finding the ones you miss ..you girlies are the back page darlings of this place, and I appreciate the way you read so faithfully more than my words will say. Amy...dont apologize girlie...life takes us away from here and theres just no way to keep up with it all....thank you too for your constance on my poetry. M.E. ... hey you...welcome back....so good to see your name here...thank you muchly for such kind words. hey bae *S .... always a smile on my face to come here and see you've stopped in. thank you so much for such such lovely compliments of my work. Rosemary....thank you also for this humbling reply...your kind words touch me...its so good to see you here today too...glad your back with us. P-man....you crack me up....I got the perfect diversion...warm up those S's and I'll warm up the Arch LOL ..thank you for the read sweet tease...I'll be in touch. *S* Sud....thank you so very much for the beautiful poem... I love this part: "while in constant belief that life is supported by the very elements that create a sustained warmth" you know well what my poem was speaking of...thank you groovy-guy...its always a moment of warm when you stop by. Charisma ...HEY GIRLIE !!....welcome back...how cool to find your name here too... thank you for the kind words. Hey Trace...you picked my fave line too...great minds think alike LOL... thank you so much for such high praise....this one kind of wrote itself...must of been those voices running thru my head *L* thank you girlie. THANK YOU ALL....your soooo cool how about how good it feels to finally forgive you |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Dear sweet Janet, life has been such a turmoil as of late, and then....then I find this again....and it just warms this cold aching soul and touches its heart....for this.......(that will teach me not to get into my library more often.....sigh.....) I THANK YOU On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. ~Me~ (I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth) [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (04-02-2002 07:48 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Donna...thank you so much girlie...I hope things will settle down for you soon, they always say things happen for a reason, and we just have to try to accept it even when we dont understand it. Its a hard lesson to learn. Your friend and you are still in thought and prayer. heart-hugs jm how about how good it feels to finally forgive you |
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