Open Poetry #19 |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
How can I leave you… I have watched o’er you this day Saw the smiling laughter glitter Golden in the touch of hand To child’s hair, Glimpsed upon an eye, spying Curve of hip, not slender Yesterday’s form but the Soft flow of tomorrows Yet to come Saw a hand stroking a sleeve, Enjoying yet again the Story of one hundred Hearings and more, waiting For the chuckle at the end I saw a dream lay down In the grass, eyes skyward, Hope floating On plans of future success All within a grasp of get I saw a bend of waist Over toys and remnants, Hurrying, scurrying toward That rush of wait, wait Today’s almost gone… And then I left you with Hope’s rainbow along your horizon, Hoping tomorrow will see you Mirroring me With your radiance again… ~*~ ©Karilea Rilling Jungel 3 March 2002 [This message has been edited by Sunshine (03-07-2002 12:17 PM).] |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Each one more resplendent than the last.. just like your wondrous poetry... |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea-- I glimsed the smile of you in this piece of a poem you drew love, yet an ache touched me too was it mine or was it yours? |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"And then I left you with Hope’s rainbow along your horizon, Hoping tomorrow will see you Mirroring me With your radiance again…" (smiles) Awwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, such romance fills these words along with a tinge of sadness of trying to hang onto this hope like the rainbow after a storm! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is breathtaking! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Lia Fail Member
since 2002-02-26
Posts 80 |
simply beautiful. Lia |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful Karilea and the picture is spectacular! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
This was so peaceful in many ways...and the pic...certainly added to the message...Very nice Karilea... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Beautiful again, my friend...smiling here... jwesley |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wow....this is incredibly gorgeous....I am so impressed. Magnificent writing! *Krista Knutson* |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari darling sister of my heart, girl this is simply outstanding writing, you have done so well here I don’t know how you do it. Again flawless and perfectly presented. What can I say but this is exceptional. YOU always write brilliantly and today is no exception. Wonderful flow and rhythm this is fabulous and the pic is spectacular, I love sunsets, almost as much as I love dawns. Truly darling girl this is awesome Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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JamesBowie Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 252big old Bangor Maine up by the shack |
tis is a splendid piece of work-I almost can relate it to my girls and my wife at the same time. hmmm do I need a psychologist? |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Autie Kari hi there, this is so very pretty, you’ve painted such a beautiful picture. I could hear my mum saying the same things, but you said it better I really do like this it’s a lovely piece from you and the picture is delightful. I really do like this one Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
How can I leave you? I have watched o'er you this day Saw the smiling laughter glitter Golden in the touch of hand To child's hair, ================================== And then I left you with Hope's rainbow along your horizon, Hoping tomorrow will see you Mirroring me With your radiance again =================================== You live up to thy pen name with this dear Sun ... radiance is a good word...yes.....a very good word. Remember your sunglasses when mirroring, wouldnt want you blinded by your own light So it seems your saving grace was only saving face, |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
OH sunshine.....WOW this is simply amazing..... And then I left you with Hope’s rainbow along your horizon, Hoping tomorrow will see you Mirroring me With your radiance again" this left me with such a peace.... Beautiful~ Lauren~ Greeneyes~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
How can I leave you… I have watched o’er you this day Saw the smiling laughter glitter Golden in the touch of hand To child’s hair, Glimpsed upon an eye, spying Curve of hip, not slender Yesterday’s form but the Soft flow of tomorrows Yet to come says so much my friend.... |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Karilea from deep within the soul this came. lovely. floria Floria |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Yowser!!! *S* This is beautiful, this is excellent... I was almost surprised at the superb personification... and then I remembered your name. *S* Flawless! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
teach you. . . well, I would think that, from reading this. . . it is you that is teaching us. . . amazing my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
Wonderful....and eloquent. And as Sven pointed ...You are the one who would teach us. thank you ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
You are so good at this Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
But you DO give me a rainbow everyday, and for that I am grateful. (sheesh look at the size of that beautiful picture will you? LOL, so there!) My but that was Sundiferious! ~* If I made you "feel" anything at all today, that makes me smile *~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
stunningly beautiful....and peaceful. thank you for this one Karilea, into the treasure box it goes. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Sunshine-- Yup! This is what I meant about the treasure chest of talent. Loved the picture! Wish that some moments would never end. Like beautiful sunsets. Thanks for sharing! Shenachie |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
beautiful picture and touching words, Karilea very wistful.*s M |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Karilea - Beautiful write. Enjoyed. Dave |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You folks are simply amazing, and if this horrendous headache would allow me to thank you all individually, I would...but it won't, at least, not now... so thank you everyone...you are all very, very special people to me, and Passions is the epitome of poetry and gracious websites... and this little gem may be entered in a poetry contest... wish me luck... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! good luck! If the judges can read, this should win. *S* |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
And with this you certaintly are Ms. Sunshine! Everything about this is wonderful! The picture you use and the words you paint are beautiful! Now it's my turn to say IWIHWT! Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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