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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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I lack the ability to compose myself no matter how hard I try to remain poised. If only my troubles would roll off my shoulders perhaps I might learn to think before I speak. My thoughts spill in a stream, running off the page leaving me lost in a daze of confusion. Wandering in an endless maze of emotions spent, bottled up inside, without an outlet to exit through. Each turn leads in the wrong direction coming up against the same wall too many times. Stinging tears, choking back sobs leaves a dull ache in the bottom of my heart. I've no sense of calm to my days it seems I am a prisoner in my own mind. Estranged by the cause and effect of a love gone all wrong. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Blues I recognize these feelings...and you have written them so well. I found a way out though, I just had to stand still for a minute, and listen to my heart. |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Blue - You definitely sound blue in this write. It is painful to bottle up emotions and dwell on them. I know, because I had a 3 liter bottle filled with them at one point.lol Nicely done. Dave |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Each turn leads in the wrong direction coming up against the same wall too many times. " same page  definately |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) This is so very sad, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and your bleeding heart and I pray now you have found the right love to cherish and hold forever! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Martie~ Thank you for your good advice. Dave~ My bottle runneth over!  Thanks.SEA~ If only I could learn to speed read I would have been finished long before now. hmmmmmmmmph!! Noah~ (one of my all time favorite songs) I won't read that book again because the ending's just too hard to take. Seems I can't put it down though. What a sad case huh? |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
BluesSerenade - When I would feel like this I would go to the health club at times and try to work them out. Works at times, but sometimes not. I have no health club here, so they do what you say in this write... BC [This message has been edited by Bill Charles (02-28-2002 01:40 AM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
well expressed...and a place I think most of us can relate to... no easy answers I know of, but resolve and time...resolve to stop the spiralling thoughts, time to ease the immediate pain.... I have truly enjoyed reading your poems... this is no exception. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
You have so much ability..I know you do and strength beyond measure...hang tight we can walk the rope together hugsssss M |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
BC~ Some days are just better than others. I feel a bit sheepish when I write like this. Thank you for taking the time. Cpat~ I appreciate your wise words, the spiraling has a way of throwing me for a loop. This too shall pass....in time. Thank you for your comforting words. nt~ It's a balancing act that I have yet to master. Thank you for being here, always. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
BluesSerenade, I almost missed this. Haven't had much time lately. But...this haunts some old memories of mine. Not much worse than an aching heart. It is like chronic pain, always there. I hate that. Only solution I ever found was time and just about anything to distract my mind. Such a vulnerable time for pity parties.  |
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Lia Fail Member
since 2002-02-26
Posts 80 |
you have a wonderful way with words. this was exceptional. Lia |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
You wrote of these feelings well...James |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
What a great way of putting it. So true, how many times I feel like this. Thanks for expressing it so well. And I like when you pour out your emotions like this, so please don't feel hesitant about it. Sandra |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Two hearts collide and when they pick themselves up sometimes they've merged as one, everlastingly, beautifully, beating the same rythymn - forever. More often though they circle, and dance, and play, loving one another with firey breathe until the moon sets, the sun rises again and they find themselves again on their previous path. Some suffer more from it than others, but they all survive, knowing more than they knew before, having learned more of loving, feeling, needing... Two hearts collide, beautiful light flickers through the sky, and always, after the pain of goodbye...the memories are beautiful. Smile my lovely friend... jimmy |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Blue you let them run over the page like this it’s a very truthful write. I can’t say I empathise because I never bottle anything up, and have never been in this situation anyway. But you’ve written it well very very well Wonderful writing I really do like it   Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Larry~ Thank you for all that you are, and every word that you share. I am happy to have found a friend in you. But you knew that already! Lia~ Thank you for your thoughtful words of praise....I'm not so sure I am deserving of them but they're so nice hear and I appreciate them very much. James~ Feelings like this are not easy to write about but I took comfort in doing so. Thank you~ Sandra~ You are just too sweet for words. I tell you these pity parties wear me out and I refuse to be having another one any time soon! Thank you dear lady~ jwesley~ Thank you for sharing your insight and leaving a lasting impression. You're much too kind. Krissy~ It does my heart good to spill it all out, much like the kind words you have left for me. Thank you for reading my bottled up message. |
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