Sleep Softly .... Conversations With My Mother a very different type of duet

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Krissy
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kent England

0 posted 2002-02-27 07:01 PM

Sleep Softly ……..
Conversations With My Mother
a rather different type of duet

Sleep softly darling daughter hear the touch of me
As I cradle you new-born so soft and tenderly
Sleep sweetly baby mine love illumes your face
Bathing me in wonder I'm amazed by your grace
Dream gently beloved baby hear my softest plea
Sleep softly darling daughter listen now to me

Mum where is my maths book?
If you put it back in your bag you wouldn’t have lost it
Mum, I’m talking to you
Can’t we have one breakfast time in peace?
I know you’ve put it away somewhere tidily
Well, someone has too
Mum where are my game’s things I need them now I do
If you wanted them washed you should have said
Why are all mums’ exactly like you?
It’s a parent thing, wait till you have children
Mum listen don’t fuss me I’m going to be late yet again
If you got out of bed earlier?!!
Can’t you give me a lift? Okay I’ll walk
I’m not a ruddy taxi service missy

Rest darling daughter snuggle into pleasant sleep
I’ll protect you darling while you’re counting sheep
Sleep softly my sweetheart tomorrow will be good
I’ll kiss away your trouble, as a mummy should
Dream quietly my darling listen close to me
Sleep softly darling daughter dreams come silently

Mum I’ll be back later yes I promise to call you
Have you got money for a cab fare?
I know you worry because you always do
Why? She asks why do I worry? BECAUSE I’m a mother
Mum he’s nice don’t fuss everything will be cool
You are not going out dressed like that
Stop panicking mum I’m not some silly fool
You didn’t tell me he rode a motorbike!!
Mum just listen to yourself I’m not going very far
So suddenly you’re leaving home, why what’s wrong?
You told me mum to go and find my star
You are going to be all right aren’t you?

Slumber my darling daughter now don’t cry again
Into every life comes sunshine mixed with rain
Drift into moonlight sweet daughter of mine
There’s another out there you’ll realise this in time
Close your eyes darling while I watch over you
Sleep softly darling tomorrow’s dreams come true

Mum you don’t understand try and listen to me
One minute you’re here then you’re there, why what’s the matter?
I have to do this please don’t you see
I’ll get your shopping and come home on Sunday for dinner
Mum you taught me to spread my wings and fly
I love you darling daughter don’t fly too high or far
But you know I’ll be back maybe by and by
Have you seen the state of that flat? Give me a kiss goodbye
Mum you are the one who steered my path to me
I swear the water in your taps has legs, take care
You know I have to go I have to fly free
I don’t care how old you are you’re still my babe

Be at peace darling daughter rest you weary head
Slumber quietly dearest sweetly in your bed
Sleep softly beloved daughter don’t fear the night
I’ll watch over you silently until the dawning’s light
Rest your eyes darling slip into dreaming time
Sleep softly darling everything will turn out fine

Marsha & Krissy
This was a strange marriage of two different styles, I'm sorry if it confuses you, but you said try so this is my try.

And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

strbbux
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1 posted 2002-02-27 07:17 PM

Oh you two. This was so thoroughly entertaining, I just cannot contain myself. giggles and giggles, and you both did so well. Just wonderful, delightful. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Denise

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2 posted 2002-02-27 07:19 PM

It sounds like every mother/daughter relationship I've ever heard about (and experienced! ) Very good!

Madame Chipmunk
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3 posted 2002-02-27 07:31 PM

Oh Marsha and Krissy...this is absolutely FANTASTIC!!!!!!!!!!!
It is written with such brutal honesty and it turned out very well. I love the way the two styles compliment each other.
Wonderful wonderful wonderful

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Mistletoe Angel

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4 posted 2002-02-27 07:42 PM

YAY!!! (giggles in delight) Awwwwwww, this is sooooooo cute, yep, better take the taxi for now! (BIG GROUP HUG) You two make such a wonderful team, sweet friend, we all love you both so so much! I LOVE IT!!! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Marsha and Krissy, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Marge Tindal

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5 posted 2002-02-27 07:53 PM

Krissy~
Did you once live at my house ????

Sounds sooooo like the many conversations I had with mine~

(I remember the day I was attempting to be stern with her over some frivolous matter and noticed she was suddenly taller than I was ... Of course I didn't let that flap me ...
I said, "Sit down ... I'm talking to you !")

MamaMarsha~
Memory-makers here ~
Mine and yours~

Duet~
You both done GOOD~
It sounds so natural~
Love to you both~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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Enchantress
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Canada eh.

6 posted 2002-02-27 08:05 PM

"Where are you going, my little one, little one....turn around and you're one, turn around you're grown, turn around you're a young wife with babes of your own..."

Krissy there was a song out, oh, many many moons ago..quite like this...and as I read this beautiful piece by you and your mum, it played over and over in my head,...At the moment I cannot recall all of the words, but do remember the feelings, and this beautiful and remarkable poem gave me those same feelings. Some of the words from the song are at the top of this reply. Perhaps someone can give me the name of this song so I can listen to it once more. Krissy and Marsha....this is so breathtakingly beautiful it left me in tears...remembering the years of my own daughter growing up and hearing some of these same lines you two have written about. The time passes so quickly...always stay close to one another.
Thank you both so much!

~Hugs to you both, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Sunshine

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7 posted 2002-02-27 10:07 PM

I knew before I opened that I would be smiling through tears....and what a smile...and what tears! Oh, but I heard my daughter and me through this one...just not so much of an accent, mind you! LOL...

And you said it wouldn't/couldn't be done...

HA!

I'm going to run out of gushy adjectives....

Greeneyes

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8 posted 2002-02-27 11:28 PM

Hey you two~

What a loving write, and how special it must be to you both....to be able to share such words from the heart....Fantastic

Lauren~

Greeneyes~

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barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

Silver Streak
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9 posted 2002-02-27 11:59 PM

Wow! You two are simply wonderful! This was so much fun. What a team you the two of you make! Will you do another one for us, soon?

((Marsha and Krissy))
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Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

Balladeer

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10 posted 2002-02-28 12:16 PM

I think this is terrific!! Two different sides to the same relationship, written from both sides. You both used your own styles and your own thoughts and created a wonderful duet. This is a keeper...

Martie

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11 posted 2002-02-28 12:33 PM

Delightful!!

Magicmystery
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12 posted 2002-02-28 12:47 PM

I am still trying to see through my tears. I can relate.. and I will soon be having the same conversations with my son... he is just 11 now and is just starting to taste his independance....

I know where you are coming from Marsha, I can remember the day he was born just like it was yesterday and I would like to keep him there, safe and sound, warm and innocent, but it just doesn't happen that way. Our children grow up. and Krissy, I can still look back and see where you are coming from too... parents seem to worry too much and seem to expect so much from you as you grow older. Never giving privilage and responsibility as equally as you would expect. I used to drive a motorcycle... so I know the freedom you feel being on one... but I would shrink in fear if my son were ever to want to own one. I would live in fear of every minute he was on it.

I am ranting... your poem touched a nerve both of you, well done...

Krissy I hope to be reading more of yours soon as well as your mother's.

Love, Light and Peace

Sherry

Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow.
But above all... be kind to yourself today.

Bill Charles
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13 posted 2002-02-28 01:36 AM

Krissy - marvelous write with mum. And yes, two different styles, but they go together well in this poem...

BC

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14 posted 2002-02-28 02:24 PM

(chuckling) Too real!! Nicely blended in a juxtoposition of style and voice to let the reader indeed feel like they are listening in...

good stuff!!!

Interloper

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15 posted 2002-02-28 03:13 PM

I loved it!
Contrary to Ron, I thought your position was juxta fine

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Aimster
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16 posted 2002-02-28 03:38 PM

This was a excellent duet from the heart. I enjoyed the words here very much. Sis you know i love you dearly and you mean the world to me and krissy, you my friend have a wonderful ability to write. please keep continuing to post. i look forward to reading more of your work. this was just beautiful you two and brought a few tears to my eyes, reminding me of my Mother. Take care of yourselves and I'll be in touch soon

Love you.
Amy

"Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't
mean they don't love you with all they have"

Krissy
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kent England

17 posted 2002-02-28 07:04 PM

Thank you everyone of you, the response to this is a great surprise to both mum and I. Shall I tell you about this duet of ours. Firstly you do need to know that mum and I love each other, so although we play tag around the forum and even have the odd tussle over possession of a certain note we do so with only fun and love. And I’ve got the note back as it happens and I’m keeping it

When we were writing this duet it was for both of us very hard work, I can’t write like mum and she cannot write like me. As I’m sure is apparent to the meanest intelligence. Finally after mum had tried to get me to rhyme my lines and I had tried to get her not to rhyme hers we came to a compromise. She wrote her little poem and I wrote mine separately, we had the theme as the steps of life and the result was this. I like it in parts, and mum does too. But when we married the two poems together mum actually winced. She did the fancy bit with the code and then covered her eyes saying she couldn’t watch me cut up her work.

As some of you have said it works and it’s a lot better than either of us expected, but I don’t know if mum will want to do another one until the shock has died down for her. If anyone else wants to duet with me let me know I want to learn and I know I’ll learn a lot. But my poems will be few and far between, so if you were expecting me to write a lot then I’m sorry. I’ll wait until I’m inspired, and I’m sure that will happen

Again thank you one and all for responding, I’ll now return you to the regular entertainment available here. Big smile

Love and warm stuff
As always
Krissy

And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

amusemi
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18 posted 2002-02-28 08:45 PM

Wow! If this is the way it's supposed to be I'm firing the therapist and going off the Prozac!!!

One word-teenagers!

GenXer
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19 posted 2002-02-28 11:24 PM

Marsha/Krissy - Your collaboration is awesome. Really good.

Now Krissy you listen to your mother now. And Marsha, let up on her a little, she needs room to fly.lol

Krissy, I have a question. When your mother speaks to you, do her sentences rhyme?

Dave

Larry C

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20 posted 2002-02-28 11:53 PM

Krissy & Mum,
Gotta say I really love duets...I do. And Krissy I'm convinced if it weren't for you your Mum would be old by now! Nothing confusing about this one. I loved it.

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