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Local Parasite

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0 posted 2004-05-17 06:53 PM

Memorandum I

There are things that only I have seen:
So I told my love, and she was swift
To buy for me a second set of eyes
Of simpler proportion as a gift.

She bought him on a shelf for petty change,
Something I would have wasted otherwise:
We tended to him, and gave him a name
A Queen's name: impotence with open eyes.

Queen Doreen is just like everyone:
Keep his water clean, and he will vie;
Keep his water dirty, and he's gone;
Keep his water not at all: he'll die.

What he loves is just a little food
What he likes is just a little light
He sits still when anyone's around
But he owns the universe at night---

His imagination is supreme
What he sees is old as soon as new,
He's forgotten everything he's seen
Every time he turns his head askew.

He falls asleep a moment at a time:
Then he's still and watching nothing turn
So I bought him his own little lamp
A second sun presiding. It will burn

And flicker seldom---it will give him ease
For he's a clever taste; so apt to please.

nakdthoughts
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1 posted 2004-05-17 08:31 PM

I love how easily this flowed Brian...and "another set of eyes"...how clever

Maureen

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2 posted 2004-05-19 07:31 PM

It's a riddle...
and I'll figure it out....

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2004-05-19 08:33 PM

To buy for me a second set of eyes
Of simpler proportion as a gift.

She bought him on a shelf for petty change,
Something I would have wasted otherwise:
We tended to him, and gave him a name
A Queen's name: impotence with open eyes.

Queen Doreen is just like everyone:
Keep his water clean, and he will vie;
Keep his water dirty, and he's gone;
Keep his water not at all: he'll die.
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A riddle wrapped in rhymes divine....
me thinks I know...
shall I guess outloud???

Very cool name...Queen Doreen.
clever write groovy guy.

Martie

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4 posted 2004-05-19 11:59 PM

Brian

You do see far to well!

Midnitesun

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Gaia

5 posted 2004-05-21 06:28 PM

you are a hoot, yanno?

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

6 posted 2004-05-21 06:56 PM

I'm off to ponder this one...
Well done!

fractal007
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7 posted 2004-05-23 09:10 PM

Interesting. I liked the form of this poem, LP, but I have never been too good with riddles. I'll have to wait and see what people turn up over the next while....

2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2
--Smit
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Sunshine

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8 posted 2004-05-24 06:51 AM

So? Where's II?

LoveBug

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9 posted 2004-05-26 11:32 AM

Nice work, Brian. I think it's about a pet.. that's something you would do, weave this intricate, cryptic poem and have it be about a fish or something.

It's nice to read you again.

Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

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