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Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

0 posted 2004-04-20 12:40 PM

Hearing the crunch of gravel 'neath my near-soleless shoes
only proves the way is not always smooth
and yet...
it is the path I must travel
without looking back upon the stones
as if they were obstacles.
Someone once called them...opportunities.
I failed to see the humor but stepped lightly anyway,
offering my movements to the world,
sacrificing the comfort of soft beds with satin sheets,
sun-kissed friendly curtains flapping
in the sweetest spring breeze.
Crawling 'round earth on stubbed toes and skinned knees
makes me realize how good it might be
to someday find the soft blades of grass,
sandy beaches that might anchor my feet.
*

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2004-04-20 03:45 PM

Crawling 'round earth on stubbed toes and skinned knees
==================================

ah--but you know what they say ...
tis not the destination but the journey.

Cool write poetess Kacy...love the theme and metaphor you played out well in this.

... and it's you ... you ... you ... you ...
the light changes when you're in the room.

M.B.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2004-04-24 08:44 PM

sacrificing...,
sun-kissed friendly curtains flapping
in the sweetest spring breeze.

~*~

But the gypsy must travel...
and I wonder
at what will come
at the end
when it begins...

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2004-04-24 10:16 PM

thanking you JM, for your heartbeat
and Karilea, I wonder too

I will be leaving Alaska on Monday, down the Inside Passage, a gorgeous three and half day ferry trip. Should be arriving first week of May in Oregon, near some horse farms. Will keep you posted when I can.
*sigh* yes, I hope this is where I'll settle for at least a couple of years. LOL, but by now, no one ever expects to see me stay anchored for long.

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

4 posted 2004-04-27 12:25 PM

This seems a bit unfinished, and the message is a bit simple for my taste. I'm less impressed with it than with your others, as it seems a mere beginning, but I'll suspend any negative criticism---

I hope you're having a nice trip.

Brian

http://www.livejournal.com/~new_formalism

Jeffrey Carter

Member Elite

since 2000-04-08

Posts 2367
State of constant confusion!

5 posted 2004-05-03 02:34 PM

This is awesome but, I, like LP, would like to see you flesh this one out a little more (don't get me wrong, the writing is exquisite, the imagery awe inspiring)

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

6 posted 2004-05-24 07:26 PM

LP and Jeff, why do I feel as if I've been busted? LOL, this IS an unfinished piece, a mere intro to a longer story I've been throwing phrases at whenever I sit down long enough to...THINK through my actions.
thanks for reading, and for your comments. I really do appreciate the honest feedback.

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