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littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

0 posted 2003-08-28 11:18 AM

Has ever a woman, spoken to you
through song and sound
midnight lingerings
just at the tip
of finger play

Has one ever brought you
in through the out door
and back again
just to fall safely
within an embrace
tender and true

Has one ever visioned
everything inside of you
so pure of heart
like driven snow
on a wintry eve

Soft slow fall of hand
to mound of freshly fallen
flurry of passion
In the dark of night
unbridled

I know you as I know myself
a glance in the mirror
sideways
I see you there
smiling, my smile
but your own

Within every single minute
of each passing hour
You are with me
for you are a part of me
from birth,
I do believe

Almost as if
the bud which appears
blooming in my garden
was planted by your own hands

tilled with fresh soil
watered by my eyes
fueled by the Sun itself
and two hearts
beating simultaneously

I study
this "common" flower
intricate in design
a spectrum of every
color, sight and sound
imaginable

I hold in my hand
one rose
delicate as the snow
beauty unforetold

Close to my own heart
to protect me
from the evils
of my own garden

And I smile
inhale it's scent
deep and longing
Eyes closed, dreaming
with hands clasped to chest

And when they open,
I am enlightened
the hands which hold such rose
unmarred by any thorn
pristine

The only remnant left
from this fleeting dreamstate
are velvet petals
falling
from one heart to another
in slow motion freeze frame
of time
eternal

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

1 posted 2003-08-28 12:55 PM

a sweet write..not to make light of but anytime i hear velvet or velveteen i think of the movie coming to america where eddie murphy in the role of an old jewish man touches the cape of an african King and asks "Vhat is dish, velvet?" nm lol to self

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bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

2 posted 2003-08-28 12:57 PM

Beautiful words here. I picked up an interesting subtext -- we'll leave it at that.

Ringo

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since 2003-02-20

Posts 3684
Saluting with misty eyes

3 posted 2003-08-28 05:48 PM

Sue... If you got any better at this...
These words are indeed some of the softest, and sweetest and most sensual words I have yet to view on this site...
Thank you for sharing them with us.

We are all equal but we’re individually different
and able to reach the impossible if we try.

[This message has been edited by Ringo (08-28-2003 07:07 PM).]

Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

4 posted 2003-08-28 05:55 PM

oh wow..sue..

insanity is not a crime

Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

5 posted 2003-08-28 06:07 PM

I am singing Prince now along with other stuff going through my mind...it's good to feel this sort of emotion..love it as usual...there isn't anything that I don't love from you..

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

6 posted 2003-08-28 10:42 PM

the title made me think of the velveteen rabbit.. i think i need to watch that movie now.. or find that book.

Anyway.. Wonderous.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

7 posted 2003-08-28 10:49 PM

Raph thank you and now that got me thinking about McDougals daughter's boyfriend with that hair! (you know he was in ER!)

Yes Mikey cant get a thing past you now, can I? *smile* thank you

Brad, you are much too sweet to me . . .
thank you so much

Liz, I take it you liked? *smile*
thank you

Kris, you are so good to me . . .
keep singing those tunes please and
yes . . . it does feel nice
thank you

Alyssa - lmao - I thought of that too - seriously
thank you

Thanks guys
xxoo

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timothysangel1973

Senior Member

since 2001-12-03

Posts 1725
Never close enough

8 posted 2003-08-28 11:09 PM

Another prize my friend!

...and since we are talking about what the title made us this of...

I thought of bunny rabbits...ya know, the Velveteen Rabbitt!..hehe

Okay,
Seriously...I loved the flow, and the powerful way you weaved your words...

)))hugs(((

Tima

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

9 posted 2003-08-28 11:22 PM

interesting subtext huh?

grin

yeah
and hairy too

love this
and you
and who it is for

petalWing

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

10 posted 2003-08-29 09:10 AM

Tima, yes reminded me too - and thank you so very much for your sweet replies

Bri - *smile* ok ya got a chuckle there
happy? lol . . . love you guys too
and thank you for knowing

Thanks guys
xxoo

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

11 posted 2003-08-30 02:15 AM

I love this Susie

A write that is a little different for you.
A new and fresh angle, yes?

Ed...

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

12 posted 2003-08-30 07:45 AM

OOOOOOh susie gal.

this speaks, sings, laughs and cries.

One of your best here. just, wow.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

13 posted 2003-08-31 03:47 PM

Aye youre refering to soul glo lol

"Just let your sooouuuuuuuuul glo!!"

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

14 posted 2003-08-31 07:47 PM

Ed, thank you so much and yes entirely different for me, finding a new voice, I hope . . . I lubdub ya, ya know
*smiling really smiling* . . . somehow I think you do . . . (Colts think of the Colts . . .)

gemma . . . thank you soo much
That meant a lot to me, I have been trying to write really good lately and just nothing was sparking, you know? Then this fell out of my pen

Raph - yessss LMAOOOOO OMG ahahahaha soul glo - ahahah that got a real laugh . . . and LMAO isnt that a disco tune? Or a windex commercial? I somehow cannot picture you in a white tux with a silky shirt and a gold chain . . . umm wait yes, yes I can . . . (goodfellas) ehehehe
sorry, had to , it is my job, afterall
*innocent littlewing smile*

Thank you guys
xxoo

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wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

15 posted 2003-09-01 01:07 AM

"Then this fell out of my pen"...Sheesh

And you know, I lubdub ya right back

*Thinking Colts*

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

16 posted 2003-09-01 04:51 AM

welll . . . it did . . .
*smile*
brrrrrr . . . *shivers*
yes, I do know
xxoo

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