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gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
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Pencilveinia, USA

0 posted 2003-08-18 07:37 PM


Dusting for prints
need never have
~touched~
to make your mark

wading
melody and I
are all the evidence
needed

from head to toe

unscrew
what tightens

bottle top
when needed
second and thirds
drink me thirsty

every
last
drop

there is empty
and there is
EMPTY

where melody
and I wade
mirage
would
trick you
into
believing
it
were
true
.
.
.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

© Copyright 2003 gj - All Rights Reserved
Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow
1 posted 2003-08-19 12:35 PM


I get it,
and I dig it.

Cpat Hair
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2 posted 2003-08-19 08:11 AM


hmmm.... understand this..perhpas too well...

it is well done Gem.... and made me stop and remember a few things..too many to be able to really comment on the poem itself..

so.. I'll just say.. well done.

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
3 posted 2003-08-19 02:34 PM


you need a laugh as much as i do..fer ye me lass...

'Bonjourrrrr ya cheese eating surrender monkies'
Groundskeeper Willie teaching french

"I ated the purple ones..they taste like..burning"
Ralph Wiggum eats poison berries

"..my cats breath smells like cat food"
R Wiggum wooing Lisa

"There are three ways to do things: the right way, the wrong way, and the Max Power way! '
'Isn't that just the wrong way?'
"Yeah, but faster!"
Homer aka Max power

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (08-19-2003 02:51 PM).]

Wind
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4 posted 2003-08-19 08:34 PM


awsome poem girl..like fragments that all fit together. And don't mind Raph...he doesn't know that smileing is evil. eeevil!!!

insanity is not a crime

Allysa
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In an upside-down garden
5 posted 2003-08-19 10:45 PM


There is empty and there is EMPTY.

I loved this. Exactly the same but not.

GREAT!

Skyfire
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Riding
6 posted 2003-08-20 12:42 PM


*big hugs*

There's nothing like a good fight with a horse to put your problems into perspective
Happy Trails To You

bsquirrel
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7 posted 2003-08-20 07:02 PM


Beautiful.
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