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What Can Be but Lost, and Not Forgotten |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida 
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I wish I had the ability to capture a moment in time, pick it fresh and scented and press it within the tomb of me to find one day, forgotten surprise at the discovery, and renewing gasp at remembrance Driving one day, trying to beat rain a/c giving me the cold shoulder windows down, with the hope that I won't get drenched. Two butterflies monarchs, I believe courting and playful, in love with each other and the sunlight as witness (what clouds?) Lovely in their dance dipping and swirling - tranced there seemed a string pulling one by another, never more than a breath apart They were delicate...beautiful And I hit them. Fervently beseeching my mirror tell me tell me One lone butterfly - tossed asunder lost and alone ran off the road, screaming grief I had to stop and I cried at the humanity of it all Played through my fingers, to fro silky soft to touch this moment placed here - just so pressed, to be remembered Carelessness never forgotten [This message has been edited by Nicole (08-16-2003 09:49 PM).] |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
This deserves more than zero replies, nicole. Nice job. |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
a study - nice. pathos almost to tragedy, but not quite. -majnu |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I wish I had the ability to capture a moment in time, pick it fresh and scented and press it within the tomb of me to find one day, forgotten surprise at the discovery, and renewing gasp at remembrance =================== Two butterflies monarchs, I believe courting and playful, in love with each other and the sunlight as witness (what clouds?) Lovely in their dance dipping and swirling - tranced there seemed a string pulling one by another, never more than a breath apart They were delicate...beautiful ======================== Played through my fingers, to fro silky soft to touch this moment placed here - just so pressed, to be remembered Carelessness never forgotten =========================== Not careless sweets...sometimes things just happen...its not about fault or careless..it just is............ I wish I had the ability to capture a moment in time, pick it fresh and scented and press it within the tomb of me *** OH..but you just did me dear poetess..with this exquisite write...you just did!! and I wish I had the ablitiy of words to tell you how much this poem touches me.... Lovely in their dance dipping and swirling - tranced there seemed a string pulling one by another, never more than a breath apart *** when I read this is sighed...and said YES...thats just exactly how they look when they fly like that...like a string... and you found the perfect words to capture it and paint it in our minds... never more than a breath apart STUNNING!! Poetry in motion Nic...placing this one in me butterfly library.   "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh My, this is stunning....absolutely! I wish I had the ability to capture a moment in time, pick it fresh and scented and press it within the tomb of me to find one day, forgotten surprise at the discovery, and renewing gasp at remembrance Two butterflies monarchs, I believe courting and playful, in love with each other and the sunlight as witness (what clouds?) Lovely in their dance dipping and swirling - tranced there seemed a string pulling one by another, never more than a breath apart They were delicate...beautiful One lone butterfly - tossed asunder lost and alone ran off the road, screaming grief Wow, I pictured every word in my minds eye, I was there. I'm keeping this. Maree  fate is not just |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Someone tell me why I've never read you before?!!!! That was all so real, so soft,yet reality ridden, I am in love with every word of that, and cannot quote for fear of pasting the whole poem like a fool. Nicole? you have a new fan. Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
What JM said... and my own understanding of how such things and times make one feel. very nicely done... nice indeed |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Allysa - Thanks girlie, for the reply and the bump.  manju - thank you much, I'm very glad you saw it that way. JM - You sweet thing, you - you always have the most wonderful replies. Doesn't matter what mood I was in when I wrote it, because I'm always uplifted when I read what you have to say. I'm happy that it touched you so. Hugs you Maree - Hey you! Thank'ya dearie Gem - I am very touched, thank you so much! Cpat - You darling man, thank you muchly. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
The impact of every word has left me speechless... You are one hell of a writer. Susan |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
That was affecting...wow. |
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