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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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Have you ever felt like a ball of dust? raging maelstrom burning blaze cool blue jewel amongst morning haze deep sea green grass in need of cut a razor's edge a knife that's blunt the whipping wind a bird in flight the eye of sky to brighten the night searing heat on a summer's eve a tire flat a piece of meat no matter how hard I try I deny me to you see can you still f-e-e-e-l me? [This message has been edited by littlewing (08-08-2003 04:38 AM).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Have you ever felt like a ball of dust? ..... I have, I have, my friend... in fact I am feeling like one right now... a very fine write this one, Sue... regards sudhir |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
This could not have been any more perfect... I feel this right now. I hate feeling. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
image jabs oh yes feeling you  |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Feeling it/you here Susie. This just about covers it, yes? Ed |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This is just such a wonderful peice of poetry, I've read it a couple of times and I think I appreciate it more every time I read it. Andy |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I felt like I had to reply again because I keep feeling compelled to revist this an read it over and over and over and over again... in other words, I really really like it. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
I have susie. me likes this muchly, for all it says and makes me feeeeeel. Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
I love how you take an image and then transform it as the reader moves down your poem. For me it was image transforming into image, wind transforming into bird, etc... like a pink floyd video... hehe... Terrific writing, Suzie... you have a way of surprising me with something unique and different that I somehow never thought of doing myself. Ok, so that sounds vain, whatever...  Glad to have you sharing with us in Haven... thanks for your contribution! Parasite Faith is a fine invention |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you Sudhir . . . *smile* for feeling this . . . Allysa - me too, well a double edged sword indeed . . . thank you Thank you Bri, you always do . . . Ed . . YES, it does . . . *smile* thank you . . . Thank you Andy . . . that means a lot to me Allyssa . . . LOL you said you didnt like to feel . . hmmmm *smile* thank you again Hey Gem . . . I know you do and yes you feel moreso than the rest of us thank you Hey Brian, cool . . . yes I love to keep it flowing, I try to anyhow . . . and to surprise you , m'dear is an accomplishment in itself and that does not sound vain at all. thank you . . . Thanks guys for feeling . . . and reading my . . . scattered thoughts? xxoo |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Robert Smith should sing that (though he does sing some of it already). |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I always feel like a ball of dust, it's rather interesting... Awesome job  The flow and rhythm is just about perfect, and it's one of those rare poems that I actually read out loud the second time just to get the entire feel of it. Great job!!There's nothing like a good fight with a horse to put your problems into perspective |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thanks Mikey . . . who is Robert Smith? Sky - thank you so much - yes a ball of dust, I know . . . thank you Thanks guys xxoo |
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