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knightlyshadows
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obscured vision

0 posted 2003-01-08 05:51 AM



shortlived crush, of butterfly winged
whisper on my flesh. tickled eyelash
kiss of air upon my lonely cheek. palest
flush in crimson raw spread up to
touch thy face.

gentlest touch in lover's new, afloat
in love's closed eyes. bruised on
lips, warmest breathe flowed in to
quench thy thirst.

blind of sight, to all but this
woman's whispered rush. moisten tips and
touch this flesh, scrap finger to wanton's
well. harbor dream of sultry sound, soon to
greet thy love.

warmth inside, a silken web spun tight
around a tock. grip of night, blind in day,
left only in briefest time. drown in sleep, then,
bluff thy death.


This one, sort of.. well, sucks. No title, but suggestions are welcome.

[This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (01-08-2003 05:52 AM).]

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1 posted 2003-01-08 03:31 PM


I've read this about six times.  I just keep having different gatherings every time I try to interpret this poem, Tiff.  I'm not sure what to think of it exactly.  One thing's for sure... you've made me question the worth of my vision.  If I could have read this with my eyes closed, I would have.  

Sometimes I think it would be very nice to be blind in day.  You've touched me with this.

Brian

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~Allysa

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2 posted 2003-01-09 07:35 PM


I agree with Brian, it is a bit hard to understand. I think it's about a shortlived love, however. That's how it came across to me, anyway. It's a nice piece, though. I like your imagery, very good.

Peace I leave with you, My peace I give unto you: not as the world giveth, give I unto you.--Jesus Christ

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