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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... 
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Cover-up Happy, bright blue paint peels in cancerous patches exposing solid steel beneath. Dry rotting of ex-veneer quietly, slowly defeated by created beauty within. Oh, who would appreciate nakedness of bare metal as pleasant, even lovely? Quickly they come marching covering with deception layers mindlessly applied. Incognito by cruel brush peek-a-boo patient, nay victim dreams of sand-blasting savior. Happy blue paint and bare metal defeated by time, both by rust a master or martyr cover-up? ~~~~~~~~  |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hmm. Have you ever read Zen and the Art of Motorcycle Maintenance? I am right now and it sorta reminded me of it...that is, if a motorcycle's actually what you're alluding to...erm.  This was veery interesting and I'm sure I'll have to go back and read it more than 3 times to actually grasp all of it, but for now I know I do appreciate the great control of the language you've used...This is subtle, but I think I'm starting to get the whole deal of it. And it's sad. *sigh* Anyway, keep writing, I'll be sure to keep looking. ~Carly A ruddy drop of manly blood |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
Carly, seems this piece has spoken to you on a few levels, thank you. i guess the "bare" root would be metal vrs paint and in the end, time will get both. the question that remains is, as always, of point of view. Lol in my own opinion... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Or..this could be a metaphor for a woman who uses a lot of makeup? LOL In it's 'basic' meaning, I see that we are looking at the beauty of the natural state versus the 'painted' beauty which over time peals away to revel the 'real' underneath. (Was that right too?) |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
hey Sharon, yeppers could be metaphorically anything or anyone, lol, that has layers of stuff that is designed to enhance or hide the trueness underneath. And the fate that awaits both in the end. And of course the utimate question of which is/was which. The point of view question would the basic view one would carry in day to day existence, i suppose...glass half full kinda stuff? |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Interesting poem on car repair and maintenance. Seems to be a new way of looking at the phrase "don't judge a book by it's cover." You do a good job discussing the idea of the car being rusted as being possibly "better" than one might think. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Actually, I find much beautfy in rust, and also think tarnished silver preferable to shine..it IS all in the way you look at it. Enjoyed reading this! |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
thanks guys... appreciate the input. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
I love the subject matter you bring up here... "cover-up" of what we see undesirable. The true form of steel is masked by the untrue form of paint, which is what is celebrated... and not the steel... I hate being painted... |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
exactly! and dreaming of sand blaster savior to get all that junk off! no matter how many "painters" are out there... POV...does one relate to the steel or the paint? |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
"cancerous patches".. "marchig".. "peek-a-boo patient" .. this is GREAT as per usual Daniel. ^_^ It's good to finally catch up with another of your poems, I lost you there for a while!! ^^ Lynne It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold. |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
hey Lynne! yeah long time... thanks for the comment. lol was wondering if anyone would catch some of those metaphors...tis very nice to see the different layers folks have seen... good hearing from you! hugz |
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