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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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then I stood on a rock just few feet from the edge taking life as it came bravely treading the ledge now I have lost ground as the firm floor crumbled to swallow me inside and leave me in shambles here I am sitting drooped an old king on his bench to sip drops of old sweat bound by yesterday’s wrench speaking to my own ears in hopes of once again for none other listens but my shadow in pain as this today always keeps taking me back there my past bleeds in teardrops at loss of happy share |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Oh, I know this feeling. I just turned eighteen, and I've been reflecting a lot on my past, on how I used to live, compared to how life is now and promises to be from here on in. Sometimes it is difficult to grapple with the fact that our past is gone, especially when we keep being taken "back there." I like how you have written this with the sense of time held directly at the front of the subject matter. A lot of play on "then" and "now" is a good way to show the importance of the relationship between your past and present. On a more personal note, I often wonder if looking back is even worth it... if enough of our past still exists in our present, the only thing we have to look back upon are memories and things which no longer exist. Lessons we've gleaned from our experience will stick with us always; even if times were once happier, we were never more knowledgeable. Great writing as always, Sudhir. Glad to see your face in the Sanctuary, and I hope you stick around. Parasite Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored. ~Aldous Huxley [This message has been edited by Local Parasite (11-19-2002 01:27 PM).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thanks a lot LP for your fair response... Regards to you, Sudhir |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Old king cold. Loved it, Sudhir. I'm glad you're posting in sanctuary, too. Mike |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Hi old friend!  I love this stanza- as this today always keeps taking me back there my past bleeds in teardrops at loss of happy share This is such a sad poem, but as LP said, we all look back on our past with some kind of sadness of the things we have left behind. I guess we have to teach ourselves to look head. Very heart felt and well-written! Most of us go to our grave with our music still inside of us. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hi to the both of you... Thanks for your wonderful words... regards, sudhir |
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