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that dry hiss

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

0 posted 2002-11-09 12:58 PM

sandpaper
is my favorite
word

but how long can you
read it
before
tiring
of the
drone
of
unborn glass
on
buried
bone

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2002-11-09 03:04 AM

if you want
to ache with me?

we find a better word, luv...

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2002-11-09 03:07 AM

um....

howwazzat?

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

3 posted 2002-11-09 11:59 AM

nothing "tiring" about this poem, enjoyed

I used to make phantoms I could later chase images of all that could be desired then I got tired of counting all of these blessings"h.devoto magazine

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2002-11-09 09:08 PM

...unborn glass
on
buried
bone...

Dang.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

5 posted 2002-12-19 01:23 PM

Arrrrgh. That hurt.

Your writing always evokes...

Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

6 posted 2002-12-22 02:18 PM

Sandpaper, eh? Unborn vs Buried suggests some sort of lifecycle thing... and I'm not sure how sandpaper relates to that exactly. Maybe you mean how it slowly wears something down until it is gone?

Is that the function of the word "sandpaper," as something that slowly and subtly softens to death?

Hard to tell. I like the word "sandpaper" too. It's a high-quality word.

Clear that up for me though, ok-ay?

Parasite

It's amazing the effect ice can have on the world.
~Allysa

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