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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa 
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I watch through miles of glass distorted she is attacked savaged and my wide-eyed fists pound pound resound against distance repeat and again resistance is mute and hate is deaf and I watch through the guile of glass distorted she has retreated ravaged and my fisted eyes wide resound resound pound against the vision repeating again persistance is hate and mute is deaf and I watch her punish herself and I pray she read the cracks I made in the miles of glass |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
... brian? /pip/Forum58/HTML/001452.html i dont think ive ever linked my own poem to a reply, unless it was written in tribute. here, the link IS tribute. to show: i understand... as different and alike as both messages were... you have struck me and i feel myself shattered by your words. the impotent casings of human beings. god how we squirm. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*shaking my head at you* why do you do this to you? I worry about YOU too yanno...frown I love you bri...sigh...  how can i rest when you won't? |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Ahh. You're as sensitive as I am, aren't you? Yes, I think so. (just don't be as sensitive as Cobain) |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
meg- thankyou, you honor me and yes, I have been whining about the inadequacies of our gravitybags for a while now......so..restrictive you- I can't help it smile for me? mike- I haven't felt like that in years and it didn't happen then so......knock on plastic thank you, Mike |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 ?Howzzat? Now you restwill ya? You are going to be needing your strength.  |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Ohh interesting.... the pounding against miles of glass is definitely a good way to describe the feeling ot trying to reach someone who's so secluded and kept away. Reminded me of that one part in Donnie Darko. Very nicely written, Mr. Sites. Parasite God becomes as |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wow that was an intense read, I'm incredibly envious of your writing, it so passionate, yet it is still well crafted, thanks for sharing Andrew |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
An awesome poem! I love the way you've sort of messed around with the senses and roles of parts of the speaker's body, like the "wide-eyed fists." This is a very frightful poem with a jagged layout that fits it perfectly. 2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2 |
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