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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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The Night Fell Grey © 2002 C.G. Ward you, walking away as the moon spills a pale smile upon the glistening of my tears. dark now, the tide moans your name through the echo of my loneliness. but I was never a poet, I just pretended to rhyme, if only to keep my fingers on the nape of your neck, or to whistle appreciation that I could never really voice. so I slide my emotion across the sand, wishing for a wave to wash it away. but the water’s calm and I think I’ll never forget when the night fell grey. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
GEEZ!!! If you're going to write like this I'm going to have to have more TIME to think!! LOL I love it. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
heh heh -- a challenge well met, C. She said burn ... together. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Sigh..  You are good with this kind or poetry.. Beeeutifulllll hehe -Lynne It's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
i dont know what challenge you were trying to meet..but this is awesome |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
if i remember rightly (and it's been almost two years, so don't expect me to remember rightly), this was a challenge where someone would toss out a phrase (i know Sharon, bsquirrel, and myself were playing, though can't recall if there were more) and we had to write a poem about it as fast as we could... there was many a poem written that night! Thanks muted for bringing all my old stinkers up.  |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
I gots to agree wif muted Christopher, this is awesome. I especially like these lines ... "so I slide my emotion across the sand, wishing for a wave to wash it away. but the water’s calm and I think I’ll never forget when the night fell grey." |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
but I was never a poet, I just pretended to rhyme, if only to keep my fingers on the nape of your neck, or to whistle appreciation that I could never really voice. ~*~ Yeow!  |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Inspirational writing, thank you for sharing. Andrew |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
wow you always could move me with your words. ok now need to think of a flaming reply to see if I am ignored or not...lol Marilyn. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
but I was never a poet, I just pretended to rhyme, if only to keep my fingers on the nape of your neck, or to whistle appreciation that I could never really voice. what you do with words, I so envy in poets, and wish I had just a tad of your talent... and you say this was written in a hurry...wow, amazing! Marvelous write... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Oh yes you are! And the atmosphere in this is excellent. Hard to move a poem this cold, but you did it beautifully. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
My goodness!! This just about knocked me over! I am in awe of the talent you possess. |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Ooh, beautiful Christopher. I love it. ~*Krista Lee Knutson*~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I am so glad this was brought back up, this is LOVELY Christopher. LOVELY!!!!!!!! seek the flame within yourself |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Hey Christopher, this is inspiring, and reminds me of all the nights spent at the beach (of course my own reasons) but I just wanted to say, I love how you always bring the reader into that moment just that line between word and feel....hugssss you  |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The sentimental, remorseful side of Christopher....and you do it well, good sir  |
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