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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2002-05-17 11:18 PM


He called her hands dainty.
Little clay statues that moved finger by finger.
Pressing flowers to the morn -- so bright.
To his eyes.

For years she wiped away his sweat.
She changed their bed when he was done.
She felt those clay hands melt against
the rocks of shore.

She picked shells from his hair.
Whenever they kissed, coins fell
like rain to the sea. She plucked
quarters, half dollars. All sand.

One day she had enough of his shoreline.
She packed her coast and headed east.
Found a new bed of clams to rest and roast.
Her dainty hands lay still now.

Until she says again:
come to me, my love.
Send the clock over the edge.
Send us off the edge for me.


She said burn ... together.
-TON

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (05-17-2002 11:27 PM).]

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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
1 posted 2002-05-17 11:20 PM


Interesting...not sure what the last line means..but I like the imagery here.
bsquirrel
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2 posted 2002-05-17 11:22 PM


That's 'cause it really isn't the last line ... dang, I need to edit this poem! But that goes against the idea of this. So let me just say, the last line SHOULD be "Send us off the edge for me."

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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Hurricane Alley
3 posted 2002-05-17 11:23 PM


We can always go back and tweak what we write here....I like that line better...
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Purgatorial Incarceration
4 posted 2002-05-17 11:33 PM


yeah - think of it as an encore!
bsquirrel
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5 posted 2002-05-17 11:35 PM


Do you know how hard it would be to remember that in order to read it again? I'll just take the cheap way out. Done!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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