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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2002-05-14 02:43 PM



Here's my attempt at pumpin' some life inta this place. It's based on a song by the Cure called "High." A cute li'l love song. Here's my response....


-When I see you-
When I see you
up in the sky,
I reach out to hold your cloudy hand.
I come away with blue blue air,
the autumn wind
and summer sand.
When I see your
face in a pool,
I dive down deep --
deep as I can.
I find a dime but not your lips.
Just this change without a plan.

And when I have the time
I cannot find the secrets of your name.
I picture your wet and empty eyes
that held onto the same.

When I see your
curves in the hills,
I slow slow down
and climb outside.
When I see your
smile in the sun,
I stare up to
until I'm blind.
When I see your
veins on a map,
I go down a ramp
and lose my way.
When I see your
head in my lap,
I shiver and shake
and look away.

And when I can I think
of the sometimes when we were careful free.
I think I loved you most when you were here
and not a ghost to me.

Oh you, oh you.

And when I make a mess
and second guess the intents
of your love,
I turn into the sky.
I'm looking down at you
from so up above.

Take THAT, Open.  


She said burn ... together.
-TON

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (05-14-2002 02:56 PM).]

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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
1 posted 2002-05-14 07:24 PM


Ah...welcome to our hideaway!!! I enjoyed this and hope to see you hanging out more often in here. It's a special place where we can have some quiet time.
bsquirrel
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2 posted 2002-05-14 08:45 PM


Hey, PdV, if yr here, so am I.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Martie
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3 posted 2002-05-14 09:02 PM


Hi Mike...you can write anywhere, I'll come and find you..cuase I like to read you.  Welcome to Haven.
bsquirrel
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4 posted 2002-05-15 04:09 PM


Thanks Martie. Much appreciated from y'.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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