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Martie

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0 posted 2002-01-11 10:31 PM

That Sapphire Wind

The sky is alert with a sapphire wind
that has cleaned the ridge
torn the yellow leaves
as all the waters fluff up
and slap the air with surprise

A whisper storms across my skin
nudges my dormant with ions
spreading down the canyon
in a golden dusting of passion
that lifts like spirit water
and fills my empty

I see from the window a dance
that pirouettes across the garden
I walk into it with my eyes shut
and feel the wings of exuberance
blow across my mind

Carry me across the meadow
where the earth has scattered seed
skipping with delight my hands holding revelry
across such miles as we are bound
the wind the wind takes me

twirls my dazzled eyes to you
opens my gown around me
so you can see my blushed significance
for I can climb the sky
filled with the sap of spring still
not folded or crunched in lack
but displayed and colored with chameleon

Will you come with me across the narrows
down the path into the glen
and pull my dainty dancing slippers off
and touch my soul with your wonder yes
for I would be your soft air
in mold around your swift rising breath
until the night clothes me in chill
and you cover me with feathers.
____

rewrite from 11-2000

To decorate this aging
is no longer possible, but the wind
knows, just moaning in the afternoon
changes the listener.

[This message has been edited by Martie (01-11-2002 10:54 PM).]

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-01-11 10:39 PM

Something I have always wanted to be, was dainty...but since I am not, I shall just enjoy the fact that you are, but your writing...it is....magnificent...

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29

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Sydney, Australia

2 posted 2002-01-11 10:58 PM

I loved this walk into the garden.....beautifully written!
~Roniece~

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

3 posted 2002-01-11 11:11 PM

twirls my dazzled eyes to you
opens my gown around me
so you can see my blushed significance
for I can climb the sky
filled with the sap of spring still
not folded or crunched in lack
but displayed and colored with chameleon

Will you come with me across the narrows
down the path into the glen
and pull my dainty dancing slippers off
and touch my soul with your wonder yes
for I would be your soft air
in mold around your swift rising breath
until the night clothes me in chill
and you cover me with feathers.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Martie you are sooo amazing!! This just picked me up and danced me off into the night! Ooooooh how I love this! A keeper for sure....oh yes!!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

Mistletoe Angel

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Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2002-01-11 11:12 PM

(sigh) You always paint such lovely visions, sweet friend, you climb the skies of passion and create such a paradise before our very eyes sprouting with rapture! (kiss on cheek) I love it, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Saunni
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West Virginia

5 posted 2002-01-11 11:21 PM

My goodness, this is breath taking and beyond beautiful! I loved it!

Sauni @~~~>~~

The Sun Shines
Not On Us, But In Us
The River Flows Not Past,
But Through Us

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2002-01-11 11:24 PM

                     A whisper storms across my skin
                    nudges my dormant with ions
                    spreading down the canyon
                    in a golden dusting of passion
                    that lifts like spirit water
                    and fills my empty

                    I see from the window a dance
                    that pirouettes across the garden
                    I walk into it with my eyes shut
                    and feel the wings of exuberance
                    blow across my mind

                   ============================================
                   Will you come with me across the narrows
                    down the path into the glen
                    and pull my dainty dancing slippers off
                    and touch my soul with your wonder yes
                    for I would be your soft air
                    in mold around your swift rising breath
                    until the night clothes me in chill
                    and you cover me with feathers.
=========================================================

you write "exuberance"  like no body else can...and we get to touch it by the gift of your pen.....
gawwwwd I love the anticipation and promise of this beautiful poem.
outstanding write Martie you are a Sapphire wind.

Even thru the darkest phase, be it thick or thin
Always someone marches brave, here beneath my skin
Constant Craving ... has always been.

Ivy Rose
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since 2001-12-29

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MA, USA

7 posted 2002-01-11 11:30 PM

Stunning imagery and use of metaphor!!!! EXCELLENT POEM!!!! ***Ivy Rose

Lone Wolf
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Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

8 posted 2002-01-11 11:48 PM

Beautifully done, Martie. The imagery was stunning!!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Denise

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9 posted 2002-01-12 12:02 PM

You do paint such lovely images, Martie! Beautiful!

VAS
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Oregon

10 posted 2002-01-12 12:05 PM

this fills the mind with tender sensations...you are so fantastic and that kind of writing!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Victoria

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11 posted 2002-01-12 12:16 PM

I remember reading this before when i first came to Passions...i remember the dainty little slippers ..and some other parts...but enjoyed reading it again Martie..

~Vic

"To love and be loved is to feel the sun from both sides."
~ David Viscott

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

12 posted 2002-01-12 02:55 PM

Sigh Martie....You are totally amazing. I love how your writing makes me feel. I loved every line but especially this......

Will you come with me across the narrows
down the path into the glen
and pull my dainty dancing slippers off
and touch my soul with your wonder yes
for I would be your soft air
in mold around your swift rising breath
until the night clothes me in chill
and you cover me with feathers.

Thanks Martie

Maree

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13 posted 2002-01-12 04:51 PM

Yes, a very enjoyable walk in the garden. One could almost enjoy the cold.

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

14 posted 2002-01-12 09:58 PM

I hate to "ditto" Sunshine, but yes, dainty is something I too will never be LOL, but I think your writing is so delicate, feminine, and oh so vividly clear in its images, and I will never, ever get tired of reading anything you write for I am always better for having read it. This was no exception dear Martie.

~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~

Balladeer

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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

15 posted 2002-01-12 10:19 PM

Martie, how I would love to see your poetry on Nature compiled into a book. It would be a must for every coffee table in America....another beauty here

strbbux
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Posts 3859

16 posted 2002-01-13 11:47 AM

"Saphire Winds" Oh how I love your word usage in this Martie. great poem. floria

Skyfyre
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Sitting in Michael's Lap

17 posted 2002-01-13 04:53 PM

*breathes slowly*

Yes, quite.

~Linda

Logan
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since 2001-05-28

Posts 1641
Arkansas

18 posted 2002-01-13 05:38 PM

Ahhh, Martie, Martie, you take words and make them into a masterpiece of imagery and thoughts..so very well done...very gentle smile

Canuckster
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since 2002-01-09

Posts 285
New Mexico, USA

19 posted 2002-01-13 06:08 PM

Very moving and wstirring write. This is the second of your pieces I have seen. You are a pwoerful writer and I look forward to seeing more in the days ahead.

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

20 posted 2002-01-13 06:15 PM

Library material, Martie, library material.

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

21 posted 2002-01-13 07:05 PM

You really brought me right into the moment with this one, Martie...
Simply beautiful and vivid imagery.

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

22 posted 2002-01-14 10:36 PM

MartieSweetSis~
Everything you pen touches me in a special way~
To have one tenth of your 'ink of think' would be enough to tide this writer over for a lifetime~
Beautifully done, as always~
Love you~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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