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Charms85
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since 2002-01-11

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0 posted 2002-01-11 12:55 PM

Forgive me, this is quite the long poem, especially for a first time user of this forum place. hehe. I have a love for poetry and writing it, which is why I want to start placing them in here. I hope people enjoy reading my poems as much as I enjoy writing them. Of course, my poems are better written when my emotions are totally messed up. So this poem was written when I wasn't very happy. *grin* Thanks for reading. I very much appreciate it. Take care. Sorry it's so long. I had a lot to say. hehe. later.

Lonely Drive.

Speak lightly into the phone
This is your last night
You wish to say goodbye
All you hear is the dial tone
Pack up your bags
Shove your darkness back
Into the suitcase.
Move on out.
As you close the door, you
Forget that you're alone on this.
Don't wait for your mother,
Stubborn. Get out.
Run away. Get away.
Do this on your own.
Carry your baggage alone.
You want to be independent,
But you're too afraid to live without
Someone by your side.
Hold my hand, Mommy!
Daddy, don't leave me!
Shove those thoughts away.
You're alone. Driving.
Driving alongside the road
Scrape your tears. Grow up.
You are not like them.
You're different.
You are chasing your own shadow.
You're so alone.
It's dark out. You
Can crave the light, but
It won't find you
Until morning.
That is an eternity away.
Can you speak of good fortune?
Are you feeling strong?
You are weak. I'm sorry.
You can't drive alone.
You can't fight this on your own.
You can't even face yourself, huh?
What do you see when you stare
At the rearview mirror?
Nothing? Not surprising.
Don't pull over. Don't cry.
You'll get over it.
Get out there again.
Quiet the sleeping baby.
There's more road ahead.
Can you make it that long?
Don't disappoint me again.
Don't give up.
Chestnuts seem to be roasting
On someone else's fire
As you list your fears,
Beg for life of your own.
Pray for the strength
To find the road. Don't give in
To your mom.
You are on your own.
You are all alone.
The only one who can face
Yourself is you.
Don't defeat the challenge.
Drive.
Gasp for breath and
Live again!

serenity blaze
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1 posted 2002-01-11 01:16 AM

Welcome charms...this is wonderful...and I like the metaphor of just one stage of life, when in actuality, I think we feel this, and the inbetweens of endings and beginnings in ALL aspects of our life. Wonderful journey of writing with excellent metaphor. Welcome!

Larry C

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2 posted 2002-01-11 01:27 AM

Hey Charms,
Welcome to Passions. Hope you like the blue pages. This is a wonderful place.

Wow do you ever bring back memories to my head. Reminds me of leaving home at nineteen. A pretty empty feeling. You expressed yourself well. I like it.

By the way, I'm the best and hippest grandpa in this place!

[This message has been edited by Larry C (01-11-2002 01:30 AM).]

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2002-01-11 02:02 AM

I've had lots of lonely drives...James

Keith Morgan
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Md

4 posted 2002-01-11 02:08 AM

That drive is scary for those moving on. The future and change is good. I enjoyed this drive into reality. Excellent poem.

Write from the soul and the words will flow

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

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5 posted 2002-01-11 06:18 AM

Charms,
Welcome to Passions, I hope you enjoy the ride as I enjoyed the journey you wrote.
Write on
kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

6 posted 2002-01-11 10:37 AM

Welcome to Passions! Please check your E-mail for a special Greeting!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.

Startime
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7 posted 2002-01-11 10:44 AM

Welcome to Passions...I can see from this poem that you speak and write from your heart. I will be looking forward to reading more of your poems. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

His Poet
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since 2001-12-18

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8 posted 2002-01-11 10:46 AM

Charms, You started off with a winner. Excellent writing. Stirs the imagination as I can see a young women checking her rearview mirror as she drives in the darkness. Well done. Cheryl

Mistletoe Angel

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9 posted 2002-01-11 12:05 PM

BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, this is a wonderful retrospective poem, it's as if what's behind is like the rear view mirror and what's ahead is seen by two headlights! I love it!!! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Irish Rose
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10 posted 2002-01-11 12:22 PM

Welcome and I know of no length limit so write away!

Emotions fuel the words......

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

Enchantress
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11 posted 2002-01-11 12:24 PM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!

Very impressive first post!
I shall look forward to more of your work.
~Hugs, Nancy Lee~

~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now

12 posted 2002-01-11 08:45 PM

Charms85 - welcome to PIP, look forward to ready more of your writings...

BC

Nightshade

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just out of reach

13 posted 2002-01-11 09:25 PM

Charms85, Welcome to Passions. Very interesting piece - enjoyed. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

rosepetals25

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14 posted 2002-01-11 09:36 PM

Charms85,

Hello:waves: Welcome to Passions! I like this poem..

It's a nice way to begin your stay here. I know you will love it here.. how can you not

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
- Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

Larry C

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15 posted 2002-01-11 11:15 PM

Amanda,
Tara needs some help. What she wanted to do and me too is to

catalinamoon

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The Shores of Alone

16 posted 2002-01-12 07:48 AM

Hi, a late welcome from me, too. I like this, very well done iterpretation of that time and feeling.
Sandra
PS You will notice I don't do specifc critiques of poems, just enjoy them. So if I don't get specific with anything in my replies, know that I am always that way

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