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Silent Fall |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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And we rested under the tree The smell of lavender, interrupted the sky You taught me to love nature To feel the gentle breeze, Watch the rain stain the ground In tiny droplets as the Sand gains pattern Surrounded in touch, We lay naked on long Mornings in passionate Dreams of one whom Slept beyond the dawn November sunsets can strike the Soul and leave the smallest joy Do I dare speak of such Things, Now? Here? Once, only once In a life time you feel This way, did any one Remind you, what you Love, is beautiful? I'd sigh if you would Notice, but I fall silent To the kiss The canvas still hangs When the tower is empty Tomorrow's another day and I'm thirsty any way so bring on the rain [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-10-2002 11:13 AM).] |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Do I dare speak of such Things, Now? Here? Once, only once In a life time you feel This way, did any one Remind you what you Love is beautiful? Powerful emotions, Lauren. We could all use reminding. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) So beautifully bittersweet, sweet Lauren, you always paint such beautiful visions of love! (sigh) May the canvas of your heart be painted with true love and joy to last a lifetime! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - the more I read this, the more touching it becomes. I have no other words except the beauty of this write... BC |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* such love as this...rare and perfect in its design...wonderful in the feelings shared...and much more left yet unsaid in the silent fall. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Very sweetly written. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Greeneyes, This is just georgus! I love this. Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
To feel the gentle breeze, Watch the rain stain the ground In tiny droplets as the Sand gains pattern Surrounded in touch, We lay naked on long Mornings in passionate Dreams of one whom Slept beyond the dawn ================================== "November sunsets can strike the Soul and leave the smallest joy Do I dare speak of such Things, Now? Here? Once, only once In a life time you feel This way," While writing your heart you also wrote a moment in time engraved across mine .... and yes..only once will it feel "this way" but the gift of touching that "once", the traces left behind in that November sunset, makes the knowing it wont come again acceptable...makes all the tears worthwhile. Once again you take me there...thank you for that dear Lauren. jmI ask why you come here, you say just because Could I live without it if I knew what it was But it really dont matter when you look at me that way. [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (01-10-2002 01:21 PM).] |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
"You taught me to love nature To feel the gentle breeze, Watch the rain stain the ground In tiny droplets" Just lovely, Lauren. *hugs*me Michael Auguste~ |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
This does what I always find hard to do in poetic expressions of love. It accomplishes your goal without sounding, trite, cliche or overly syruppy. You've done this by using word pictures to paint what you're saying rather than tryng to abstractly describe your feelings which inevitably leads to using words that have traditionally been overworked. Bravo! Well done! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Sometimes the smallest joys are the best ones ..beautifully written as always Lauren.. enjoyed very much..  ~Vic "To love and be loved is to feel the sun from both sides." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lauren...this is EXQUISITE!...love it! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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JAR Junior Member
since 2001-11-06
Posts 34 |
'and we rested under the tree' in gentle breeze' and i learned to love nature' |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Fear not dear fair maid though not in tower dwell. For your bed has been made for the knight you know well. I love towers... enjoyed the poem... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
now, this speaks with the power of love known. . . and love dreamt of. . . only you know this voice my friend. . . soft and lovely in the night. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lauren, You left me wanting...was that on purpose? |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Duncan~ thanks for stopping by, I enjoyed your thoughts.... ~~ Noah~ I wish to find that love again...its out there somewhere...thanks my friend, you boost my spirits... ~~ Bill~ I appreciate you, and your kind replies always... ~~ Startime~ alot left unsaid in the silent fall...thank you for your hugs....I appreciate the thoughts... ~~ LngJhnAg~ thanks for stopping in...good to see ya... ~~ Tara~ thank you...and for the hugs....hugs back to ya... ~~ Janet Marie~ so many traces yet to find....I am getting there....   hugs~~ Michael~ missed you being around...thank you for your friendship, and for stopping by... ~~ Canuckster~ your reply touched me, thank you...welcome ~~ ~V~ it is the smallest joys sometimes isnt it...thank my friend~...hugs ~~ Nancy~ your replies are always Exquisite, thank you...hugssss ~~ JAR~ thank you...~~ Magnus~ thank you for the poetic reply...I appreciate the thoughts.. ~~ Sven~ I keep dreaming...maybe one day it will come true...thanks my friend...hugssss ~~ Larry~ yes... thank you for stopping in....actually I like to write and try to leave the reader wanting more....good to see ya...~~ Be well Be safe...Peace... allGreeneyes~ Tomorrow's another day and I'm thirsty any way so bring on the rain [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-11-2002 09:44 AM).] |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Natures canvas is vast of contrast designed to hold those patterns of time. November sunsets reflect the past, Echoes of love and beauty in rhyme. Each step forward is a season kept, Falling so silent as towers wept. What I see through your eyes ... magnificent!!!!  |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Lauren, this is very filled with tenderness..an absolute treasure of words. Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Ctowen~ Patterns of time....I love that...I appreciate you...much...Hugs~  ~~ Irish Rose~ thank you for your treasured reply... Lauren~ Tomorrow's another day and I'm thirsty any way so bring on the rain [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-12-2002 11:30 AM).] |
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