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Dying Dreams - Tanka
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Dying Dreams - Tanka |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Dying Dreams Tanka Though inside I die the sky still sings in sapphire yet, how do dreams breathe when love has no guarantee and life, no inspiration By Melissa P. Monette |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh Melissa, a bit on the dark side, a bitter brew of tea, but lovely in its creation of lexis...well done, dear! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You just do, Melissa...you just do.  |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
The heart just seems to keep dreaming even when we think the dream has died. My heart goes out to you. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
this moved me greatly. Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
This is a beautiful tanka, Melissa. But... Why die needlessly When you open your windows Darkness always goes. Silver Streak Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) So very sad but well-said, sweet friend, may you always hold onto all your dreams close and believe in your heart, for your dreams will come true! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, all our hearts go out to you! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Melissa - you have certainly inserted a lot of meaning in so few words. Liked this much... BC |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
dreams breathe because they must. . . well done my friend. . . you find such depth in these words. . . --------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
A lot of people could identify with this tanka and it was excellent Melissa. ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
hey girlfriend, right about the time you have become bitter and given up on this thing called love and you are no longer seeking..it will come out of left field and bite you on the nose, honey! I HAD 13 YEARS WITHOUT ANY HOPE OF LOVE AND GAVE UP THAT STUPID IDEA EXCEPT IN POETRY AND HERE I AM TO SAY DON'T GIVE UP YOUR HOPE..IT FOUND HOPELESS ME..IT WILL FIND WONDERFUL YOU...LOVE, KOKO |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Melissa, Hello chickie It is so good to see something from you! Granted, I wish it was a little happier.... this is so sad  I hope you find happiness soon... I'd LOVE to see a happy from you.  Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home [This message has been edited by rosepetals25 (01-10-2002 07:58 AM).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Melissa, I have wondered this..how I feel like I am dying, but the world all goes on the same, and the beauty is still there. Thankfully the beauty usually renews me. This is well written. Take care Sandra |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
Very thoughtful, and well constructed. I enjoyed this. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
How do you manage to write sad feelings with such beauty Melissa? If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I'm sorry to hear that so many can relate to this...hopelessness is a bitter pill to swallow. But, thank you very much to everyone who took the time out to share their feelings. Your comments are always greatly appreciated Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
how can dreams breathe? they breathe because deep down in our hearts, we can't give up our sense of longing yet... hope this isn't autobiographical..if so, hugs to you... i'm just collecting stories in life....colleen from survivor 1 |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Sweet Melissa, Loveliest of Tankas and sadly profound your words, but time passes and joy comes in the morning, always! Hugs Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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mauddib Member
since 2002-01-12
Posts 119melbourne australia |
The sky shines saphire for a very good reason it ignores our despair dances on air |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
A lttle sad Melissa,but very well written. floria |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Flawless write Melissa. I once was told, when you least expect it, it walks right up to you and sweeps you off your feet. I hope for you this comes true!! On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
A beautifully written Tanka, Melissa... but please be assured...there is always hope for love...and it usually comes when you least expect it to and when you aren't searching for it.  Beware of the next frog you run into...he may be your prince. copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
So sad, yet perfectly written. Take care Melton |
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