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Last Night
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Last Night |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
I stepped outside last night To a sky full of stars Which brought to my eyes A multitude of pleasure and delight As I turned to retreat back to the heat I heard a noise just the ruffling of branches I saw something that gave me even more delight Two deer, a mother and a yearling came out to eat As I quietly watched they came to my fence Where I always have apples and salt I knew that something had been eating what I did not know The doe walked up and ate but the young one was tense I realized that the doe was the same one from last year It had what looked like a star in her forehead I turned to go in when I heard a light snort It was the doe letting me know that she had no fear I then thought of my big city friends With all the bright lights and noisy nights Wonder if they ever had the pleasure I was having Of course I knew the answer in the end alan |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Alan, what a lovely way of expressing pleasure in the the moment you have. Deerlightful. Kethry. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
I live in the city now but a few years ago i lived in the country and i miss the deer walking around my house during the day and night..a lovely site indeed...enjoyed Alan ~Victoria~ "To love and be loved is to feel the sun from both sides." |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Alan, I love this, I have a family of deer that come down to our property and each year, we watch them grow. And yep, we go through a ton of apples  I know just what you mean here....it is a wonderful feeling |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Delightful Alan !!! Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* how incredible this sight must have been. You paint the picture perfectly, Alan. Thank you for sharing this tender moment with me. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Soooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I love deer so much and I am always so happy to see them come by near my house and watch them out my balcony! (big hugggssssss) Sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, you always paint the most gorgeous visions, I love them! We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Alan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
I want to thank everyone for your kind replies. Noah my friend... I was no more than 10 feet away from them. |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Exactly right , you portrayed a beautiful sight and to read your words was a delight Hope |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Exactly right , you portrayed a beautiful sight and to read your words was a delight Hope |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Exactly right , you portrayed a beautiful sight and to read your words was a delight Hope |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Alan, there are advantages to living in the country aren't there? You have shown us what you saw so beautifully. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wow! Being a city girl...this makes me want to pack up and move to the county where we have deer roaming freely as well. Good write. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
what an interesting poem. I have never been quite that close...almost once but not quite........they are beautiful creatures aren't they/ Kathleen--(Kay) |
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srsmith25 Junior Member
since 2002-02-07
Posts 22Indiana |
Wonderful poem Alan. I love to see deer. I don't live out in the country, but I know of a place a few miles away from where I live, where deer often hang out. I drive by there just to see them. They are such gorgeous creatures. Thanks for sharing your poem. Stacy Smith |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Okay..so I'm gonna giggle first. I'd much rather see one of these beautiful creatures grazing somewhere and peaceful than see them darting out in front of my car on an open highway or dark country road somewhere. SCARY..I've been lucky enough not to run over one yet. On the other side of this, it would be quiet amazing to just watch them...unfortunately, the part of MS I'm from...nearer to the country, people are more intent on shooting them than watching them. on ANOTHER side of this. I LOVED this poem, Sir. It was beautifully done. For all who watch.Dare you say hello? Come in and ask the questions that are on your mind, but spare me your judgement until you truly sipped of me. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Nice observance Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
This is lovely, and reminds me of my home in Kansas which I long to return to someday. I am glad I did not miss this one for it made me reminisce and smile...thanks. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
great job Alan. . . you put it right there, and made us see it with you. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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